Starting at a steady andante
An accelerando in my heart’s pulse
Tempo rising
A crescendo of noise
With a blasting fermata in fortissimo
And decimating dissonance
Followed by a sudden grand pause
She smiled
And then she walked away
Kind of anticlimactic
Not even a stinger at the end
Guess it’s back to andante
Almost rubato
Maybe next time
The songs of our hearts will combine
Into a glorious harmony
Maybe……….
Author notes
Admittedly not my best work, but I did enjoy using all the musical terms. I'm a musician as well. Play clarinet and piano, sing in various choirs, etc. It's interesting to use music theory terminology in a metaphorical sense.
A contest entry
- The Music In Me Comes From Your Soul by HerbalGoat.
405 points, ended November 24, 2007, 12 entries
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Comments
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Nice job. I think the wording and flow could have been much better, but then again, the roughness of your words also adds to the effect of your heart songs not combining.
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awesome i think this is really cool would commetn more but tired and in a hurry
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