He tasted Dina
with the hands that
salted her
undersea.
She stood in the same sand
legs fighting fish, noticed
how rotten
the water smelled.
In a list
A contest entry
- the language of fish by Cat.
500 points, ended November 1, 2007, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow... I have no more articulate response to offer...
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wonderful metaphor here, i love this series...congrats on a great write and the gold
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Thank you rebeka.
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yepp yepp yeppp... gold for sure... excellent language and visuals... superb piece
and that coffee coloured skin, girl, you're taking me back to my youth
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lol! Thanks G.
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I don't know why you weren't on my favourites list, but sheessh girl, you are now!!!
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this is excellent, well deserved!
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thanks melissa
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i'm not sure i've noticed that darren and dina are a series- but this piece makes me want to check it out- find out what i've been missing-
clever turns of phrase here- i like this piece very much
you are definitely becoming one of my favorite poets on this site- i know i can always expect a strong write when your name shows up
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that means so much coming from you.
thanks m!
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I so love this Double D Series of yours, Stacy and this one is no exception. The pictures you paint with this one... deep, sea-deep this is. I so enjoyed this one... you are one talented poet!
~ Nicolette
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Thanks Nic!
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very multi-faceted
i like it
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Interesting title, use of space and interpretation of the theme of this contest. Very creative, More to it than meets the eye.
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Thank you.
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wonderfully metaphorical piece, with a hell of a close...
al
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Thanks Al.
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