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She reminds me of me

dancing through the water
of her bacarat bowl,

it seems a charmed existence
undulating there in aqua pura


I see her, but does she really see me?


she hovers
as if offering a photo opportunity

she blows little kisses
and blinks, shimmering

les fishee d'oro

she can be so koi

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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les fishee d'oro, faux frenchy italian gold fish

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  • Balldinger silver member
    November 2, 2007

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    small reminders...

    hah! a fishy brush against the funny bone. love the upside down city in the bacart bowl - full of charm and the way big cities will all eventually turn the way they're run...here's to cleo and the way she blinks...


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    November 2, 2007

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    ...so koi...I get it!

    I never pictured you as a fish in a bowl before.

    hmmmmm

    nice one NC


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      November 2, 2007
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      hehe, thanks GA...I had to try hard to get pink floyd out of my head for this one.lol

      off topic....
      I was looking at your work again the other day at EBSQ...wow...and wow...What is your opinion on Giclee printing? Have you ever used it? I'm doing so much digital (i'm addicted) I'm thinking it may be a good thing.


  • Cat gold member
    November 1, 2007

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    that final line- that's awesome- i always want to know that also- do they see us? they appear not to.. but they must- good self reflection- nicely done

    m


  • ellipsist
    October 31, 2007

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    nice play on words... well done!



    clever indeed, you creative li'l vixen you!


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    October 31, 2007

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    Excellent poem in "the language of fish." Thought the images and feelings were concise and vivid in this poem and also liked the background and title. Good luck in the contest!


  • Mirthryl
    October 31, 2007

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    Love your concluding line! And the additional pic compliments the title and descriptions.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    October 30, 2007

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    OH LOVE THIS. Been awhile since I have seen you
    Hello there He He Well anyway this is a great entry in the contest. Best wishes to you


    Delila


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 30, 2007
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    That's a killer ending. This is a winnwe.
    Joe


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    Quite a different picture you share at the bottom of this poem. Unique interpretation of the theme of this contest.


  • HaleyMary
    October 30, 2007

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    Good write. Wonderful imagery in this piece. I liked the title of this poem. It made me think of it as a metaphor, like sometimes I think people can feel like they are stuck in a fishbowl sometimes because it's like we are swimming around in circles and not always seeming like we are going somewhere in life. Good luck in the contest.


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    Love this Love the 'French mood' of the whole poem.

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