The clock reads 12:34. You blink and it's 12:35.
Kristel loves Breakfast at Tiffany`s and flare in her photos. Chasing the sun around with a butterfly net, she hides from love and dreams of capturing moments she's too scared to have.
Inhale, exhale.
Think of Jayda`s warm smile in a cold sterile hospital room. Cancer feeding on her, beating on her, eating her up as ugly words like invasive, aggressive and metastic turn her insides into soot and ash. Finally released, she has abandoned that shell to sing and dance through the stars and beyond. 50 days later he's still crying.
You hate being alone.
Dani's making gifts for strangers out of paper bags and paper clips. Poetic secrets-- don't tell anyone. She drove across town in the middle of the night to show you. Don't tell anyone. Not even your cat. Your cat could never be trusted with a secret like this.
Alone. You're allergic to loneliness. You try to be alright with it but you'd rather be anywhere but here.
Meghan follows the blonde girl around like a shadow. She says they're sisters. You know this isn't true. Blondie will keep her around till the novelty wears off and then leave her on the side of the road to bleed to death in a ditch and you'll pick up the pieces as she calls you a bitch.
You pray to God someone phones soon.
Jordan says he's going to be a dad. No one's sure which of his stories are fictional and which are real. In his own mind he's Rambo but we all know he's about 8 years old inside. He puts on 13 shirts and a jacket to lift weights in July. Uses an entire bottle of Head and Shoulders because he likes the tingling, sits in the summer sun with a film of soap scum baking onto his arms and legs. Skin flaking from his arms and legs.
Inhale. Exhale. Inhale.
Think of all the friends you have. Think of all the friends you don't have.
Author notes
This is meant to be spoken word so try to read it like it's being read to you. These are stories of people I do know. I would love feedback before I perform this piece next week. Thanks!
Please tell me what you think
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Wow
This blew me away. This was soo interesting and creative! Wow... Jane
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the imagery was powerful
you may need to preface it with author notes before you
begin or else they may not understand that you are jumping to an fro to different people in your life.
When you pact so much imagery into each person, you need
air inbetween so that they can flow, and then stop to
be ready for the next imagery you present.
(if they look confused then you'll know you need to add
more air to it)
each one of these people really deserve their own
seperate poem because of the bold imagery you serve.
ears2hearyou
Kathleen
of perhaps a little line inbetween that connects them?
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I do always preface poems I'm reading with a little intro but thanks for the feedback. I will allow time in between each character so it doesn't feel so jumpy.
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This was actually a very interesting piece to read. When I first started it I was a little overwhelmed by it but after reading your author notes i reread it and really enjoyed it. It did bring to mind friends that actually mirror yours and so brought a smile to my lips. Thank you!!
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Thanks jcat! I appreciate the feedback.
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