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baited

snatched in barbs,
you wriggle a little;

your smile,
on parted
lips,
was such a giveaway

no one likes to be
caught:

hook;

line;

sinker...

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  • J.J. Sass
    November 1, 2007

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    I think I have to agree with Melissa here... I like to be caught, but that depends on who's doin the catchin lol.

    Nicely done.


  • Cat gold member
    November 1, 2007

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    so many directions this poem can be taken in- i really like this to the point - well worded and phrase conservative piece-
    nicely done elaine!

    m


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    October 31, 2007
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    oh you naughty thing you!
    lol


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    Loved this one - multi-layered piece of writing, Elaine.... good for you!!

    ~ Nicolette

  • Rowan gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    oh this is good~ lol.
    Perfect take on the prompt.

  • tara wilson gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    "your smile,
    on parted
    lips,
    was such a giveaway"

    you capture the moment so perfectly in this poem, excellent

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    October 30, 2007
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    see, i like to be caught....


    sometimes. lol

  • Suzanne Dia
    October 30, 2007

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    lol no one likes to be caught?
    methinks he did

    half the fun is in the chase, I suppose, and some of us run faster than others lol


    • misselaineous
      October 30, 2007
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      lol
      who said it was a him ... hehehe
      i am a quick runner too!
      thanks for dropping by

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