i curdle
in the absence of you
return to me
intact
Author notes
may not keep.
In a list
A contest entry
- whatever II by leander.
575 points, ended November 16, 2007, 36 entries
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Short, but very powerful actually
I wonderful snippet you have here!
Thank you for entering this contest, I wish you the best of luck!
Leander -
powerful... wording a metaphor that works in so many aspects... the brevity is quite wonderful... refreshing!
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crispy!
one of the hardest things a poet can do is write a poem of few words and have it mean so much. this one goes to show that a selection of properly chosen words can be very powerful. good work.
b
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wouch!
bitter,
i love it!
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May not forgive you if you don't keep it...
I love the word curdle. I bet you love it too, to use it so brilliantly.
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This IS a keeper.
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At first i thought you had done a quickie, and I dided a little inside. I like it.
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Should keep up.
I like how you used prosim; also, whether it's intended or not, I also like how, in a brief glance, it kind of looks like promise.
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keep...
and show it.
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no no. keep.
and perhaps expand later.
even on it's own, it's got a bit of brilliance to it.
so don't scrap it. just wait for the rest to come.
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