Isolation...
feed me.
What happened
to that coral
I swam through?
Where is
the blue fin
I ate with?
I didn't
like him
anyways.
Can't ever
sleep with that
damn neon light.
Tried swimming
into it
but was
nearly electrocuted.
I'll just
hide under this
rock
until that
monster with
so many tentacles
drops flakes in
that taste like
my shit.
Don't ask how
I know.
Swimming laps
around this tank
but never reaching
the end.
Why is that?
A contest entry
- the language of fish by Cat.
500 points, ended November 1, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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have you ever seen how they get their crap in their mouths and then spit it back out .. how do they know?-
this is cute- im glad you're here
m -
Great 'stream of consciousness' write! Especially loved the neon-light induced insomnia, and the results of "go toward the light"! Very nice.
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funny take on the prompt. I enjoyed this.
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I love the prompt and I adore your
entry. "Swimming laps around this tank
but never reaching the end..." Sounds
like my life right now
Love you, Lane
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Alex,
I see you came to the conclusion on how to do this poem in a round-about-way?I have some fish, tropical, really stupid fish, even the cats, all eleven of them, are bored with these stupid fish, and the cats like the fish flakes better than the fish.
Wait, this was entered in a contest? Damn, you're fishing for a trophy again huh? Hey, tell your mom I need to talk to her about you.
Gander
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lol.
very cute. -
oh my gahhh! this is so funny...
...
drops flakes in
that taste like
my shit....
i sat here laughing, this was so fun to read, i swear if a fish could talk i know it would be exactly saying this...i needed a fun read, thank you for being so creative, a great fishy poem!
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