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After Reading Wesley to Him

 

 

I saw you
from above:
sat in the gnarled branch
perfectly azure and verdant
like new moss and summer sky
a keen eye                     poised

quiet           waiting


from under the water
thinking, no-one knew I was there

swimming in slow existence


But the ripple from your rising yelp
caught me off guard,
the swish of majestic wings
diving down, beak ready

swift and fearless,
you plucked me,
the fish with the blue-grey eyes
where I bathed in a lifetime

of thick-water and hidden reeds


You, the Kingfisher
swept under the ice-like film
of shallow waters

and rescued the minnow

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • rebeka
    November 2, 2007
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    i love this one, a wonderful romantic write, congrats on this


  • Cat gold member
    November 1, 2007
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    sigh worthy



  • Utok Bulinaw
    November 1, 2007

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    I especially love the opening stanza. The visuals are so clear and the tone is so subtle that it doesn't overshadow the gentle images and emotions of the poem. I really like the rescuing of the minnow. A very creative and gorgeous write. Best wishes in the contest Ms. Chilly. Cheers! R

  • LazulineBeaches
    October 31, 2007

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    that's a really cute image.. at first, one would think that the minnow would be in trouble, but being rescued does give a different connotation.. kind of like a nervousness, and being caught off your feet, or at least losing your breath, if that makes sense in a cliche kind of way... like i mentioned earlier, i think its adorable.


  • J.J. Sass
    October 30, 2007

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    aww... this is so full of love, without being lovey dovey.

    Best wishes in the contest.


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    .......what can I say? you are
    brilliant. I mean this with the
    utmost respect. I have NEVER read
    anything not worth reading by you.
    I wish you all the best, my poetic
    friend. Oh, and I dig your avatar...
    Love, Laney

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    October 30, 2007
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    you're such a sap -

    i love it!


  • michael thomas gold member
    October 30, 2007
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    I love you in or out of the water


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 30, 2007
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    "I saw you
    from above:
    sat in the gnarled branch
    perfectly azure and verdant
    like new moss and summer sky"

    Gorgeous & tender penning, my Friend. He's a lucky fellow...& I do believe he knows it, too. Then again, you're kinda lucky, too. Good luck in Mary's contest, Sweetie. Wanda


  • misselaineous
    October 30, 2007
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    no minnows here
    juicy big perch


  • EvilKate
    October 30, 2007
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    Just wonderful!



  • Suzanne Dia
    October 30, 2007

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    See, this is why I shouldn't have written for this contest.

    Sigh.

    lol

    Beautiful, Gilly

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