Sunlight sleeps
softly
its reflection
ripples gently,
as swans
lightly glide by.
Author notes
Prompt; anything 12 words only.
A contest entry
- 12 words- any subject- 2 hours by Cat.
500 points, ended October 30, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pimp up my quickies or snippets by leander.
400 points, ended December 4, 2007, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This has sort of a haikufeel to me, althought it's not even close to it, but the images you captured are really outstanding!
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O' hun this is beautiful--
so serene and picturesque.
Simply outstanding!!
love it!!
~Pastel
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quiet, peaceful lakeside moment. Nice alliteration.
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Beautiful and serene.
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lets the mind wander off to a more pleasant place.
quite a chancge for me.
This was perfect. Best wishes to you
Tory -
Such beautiful imagery. Makes one long for serenity. Bravo.
Blessed be,
Billie Jean
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i wonder about the double use of gently in such a short poem- although i do think this is a gentle pretty write
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Sorry I have bee pouring over entries all afternoon, It has been altered. Thank you for pointing it out
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