It was my teddy
He'd been murdered.
I left him out in the yard
And next day the Doll's Policeman called.
"It looks like your teddy," he said
From the station.
Teddy was so popular, known to all.
And sure enough, there he was.
I made a positive identification
And the policedoll said.
"We left him where we found him."
(I could see the white line)
"He's been in the river, it's obvious.
Then someone dropped him here."
It had to be the big dog next door.
There'd been some bad blood there.
I imagined him dragging my ted
To the river and dropping him in.
"Curtains for you, Teddy Bear," he'd say,
Then wait for a while and haul him out
Like a trophy.
"Can't find any teethmarks," Police Doll said.
So the case remains open and getting colder.
Author notes
This might be darker than you are looking for. If so, I wouldn't be offended if you DQ'd it.
I notice you've seen this before. Pls. DQ if you like.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired [Ends tomorrow] by Naridill.
300 points, ended October 31, 2007, 6 entries
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Honorable mention
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1500 points, ended April 14, 2008, 9 entries
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Dark? this made me laugh ... thank you for entering. I have a kind of odd sense of humor
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I like it, it's not really so dark. I could imagine a child playing with his/her dolls telling the story of what the dog did to his bear.
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This is really cute though as has been said a bit dark ... perfectly ok for the contest. Nice job and thanks for entering.
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Ha, I really liked this. The simplicity of it made it work well, and as said below, it does seem to kind of fit in with children's poems, though a bit dark for that. I enjoyed it though.
-Ryan
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this is very good nice job on this poem
good luck in the contest
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LOL. I enjoyed reading about the teddy. you done a great job with this poem. I'm glad to see that you won a cup with it. Love ya, Cathy
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This one would be a great one for a children's book of poetry. While reading through the stanzas, it was easy for me to imagine the illustrations that would go along with this. Great job here.... Aloha to you and yours from this side of paradise.. alisa ;-0
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Children's book, eh?
Kids do like this sort of thing, a bit of gore and death. (Tho there isn't even that much) I wrote it very much off the cuff but I am now quite pleased with it.
Thanks for the comment
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I love it! ^_^
Nice, relaxed read. I didn't feel so tight and tense as I do when I read a lot of things here on AP. It was a nice change. I like how you managed to tackle such a subject while still maintaining your eloquence. Very humorous and enjoyable. -
awwwwwwwwwww *tear*
I feel your pain
=D
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A charming piece of inconsequential nonsense, nicely handled with balance throughout. Thanks for the read and luck in the contest.
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i like this for two reasons:
1. because this is a really sad and emotional write
2. because i am not the only one who has written about a teddie being murdered i keep getting called a teddie killer lol, a really great write well done and goodluck
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So sad. What a tragic tale you have penned so beautifully.
Thanks for entering and much luck.
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