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silently slumbering

eyelids tremor

 

eyelashes fluster

 

a slight gasp of breath

 

and my mind tinkers

 

 

a picture emerges

 

and voices muffled

 

speak to me and I reply

 

while silently slumbering

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prompt: the sound of a dream
10 options for the creative poet: option 2

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  • bananasfoster42
    November 7, 2007

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    man sounds so familiar! i have the habit of deep dreaming and sleep talking. LOL! thanks for the entry!

  • Judith Chandler
    November 6, 2007

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    nice description

    of a dreamlike state -- or maybe the poet is answering someone whose awake. Anyway, you caught that state between waking and sleeping quite well.

    Good luck


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 6, 2007
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    great write i think i had one in the same contest. yours was better than mine though

  • Gott ist tot
    November 5, 2007
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    Beautiful poem about the dream, this is lovely.
    Thanks for your comment.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    Very nice. A wonderful take one the prompt. How many times have we talked in our dreams to someone there or not.
    Wonderful.

    Thank you for entering!

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