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Satisfaction

I hath no sorrow for what I have done.
I fulfills my compulsions for the time being.
Oh! the sweet scent of the departed cannot escape me.
You must'nt judge me, for I am in pursuit of happiness.

 

There she was, sitting before her vanity

Oh! How the beauty aroused the beast within.

I cannot contend to fight the rage.

This creature must die, soon.

 

She could not expect me, she had no idea.

My icy steel ached for flesh, so I must feed it

and fed it I did.

 The coldness overwhelmed her.

 

mmm, how my blade loved her warm blood,

essence of life draining upon my dagger,

it thirsts, so I must let it drink.

Hungers for life, so I fed it.

 

This being now sprawled on the floor

with nothing on but undergarments.

I could not resist

For there was another hunger I must satisfy...

 

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 18, 2008

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    This does remind me of a serial killer because in their heads they aren't doing anything wrong and they believe sometimes they are even doing something right that should be done by others and they can't see why normal people wouldn't do such things.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    January 14, 2008

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    This is a fab poem, the darkness bleeds through. The imagery is awesome. Very well penned, best of luck in the contest with it!


  • BluesMan gold member
    December 7, 2007

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    This is a great piece of imagery it was dirty and clean at the same time. Just like a shotgun! This is what I call an iteractive write where the readers imagination determins the quality of the write. Some of my darker pieces are written the same way. I

    Back in the 70's Alice Cooper wrote a song about it

    "I love the dead before their cold"
    "Nice warm bodies for me to hold"


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    October 31, 2007
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    YAY!!!!!!!!!

    THIS IS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!1
    Wow, you really have a way with words
    i loved it
    You leave the gore up to the imagination of the reader yet you draw the viewer into the depths of madness......through the killer's murderous mind-set. I FUCKIN LOVE THIS!
    KUDOS

  • shootingstars
    October 30, 2007
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    this is beautiful.


  • michichoeret
    October 30, 2007
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    nicely done

    but you could have elaborated some more on the beast inside you

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