Feel
the flutter
of my heart
Eyes
half closed
Arms
wide open
Lips...
lightly touching
Author notes
Prompt: ~Take pleasure in the details~
In a list
A contest entry
- To smile.... by Lavender Butterfly.
450 points, ended October 31, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is really good..
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I remember that first kiss. I was 5 and she was 4. To me, kissing is one of the best forms of communicating, from a peck to the 10 second kiss. I really like this poem.
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ah this brings
me back to young love...I have thoughts of inexperience and first kiss...of course the moment was brief...then the arms closed and held close...mouth to mouth...the heat arose...love the whimsical feel of this....perfect
Mal
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Great expression of real emotion. Thanks ever so much for sharing... x Love and light, ButterflySecrets.
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I'd suggest making it "lightly touching" just to keep the tense consistent, but a lovely little love poem. I've always preferred writings short.
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Cute I remember this well Good Luck!
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beautiful sentiments my dear friend best wishes always xx
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aww that first kiss...how sweet. thsi was a great vivid picture you paintes.
wonderful best of luck to you
Tory -
Very calm and soothing....like a healing to a wound...
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something everyone should remember
Rtheo -
This little snippet has a very soft and smooth feel to it actually - Almost as soft as a feather falling on the skin. I like it to be honest
well done!
Good luck in the contest,
Leander
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