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Come Hither



A corner creased;

eyes flickered
sunshine across his river,

reflecting trees against her
rusty sky.






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Prompt: "take pleasure in the details"

15 words.

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  • Li snuffles
    November 6, 2007

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    Its a really nice poem.. its beautiful!!
    ilove short poems... they're so cute

    beautiful imagery

    you deserved this win


  • Malabu
    October 31, 2007

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    looks like

    love afar...so near...and dear...the heart...a smile to bond them....lovely write..congratulations...
    Mal


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    October 31, 2007

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    This is immensely beautiful with such superb imagery within. Thanks ever so much for sharing... x Love and light, ButterflySecrets.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    eyes flickered
    sunshine across his river,

    aww i can actually feel these lines. wonderful job here it deserve the gold.
    Tory


  • PageTurner
    October 30, 2007

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    Meaningful metaphors, Poet.

    ~ Nicky♥

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