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Remember Yourself

Many things distract you
From who you really are.
Society's strict rules you have to follow
Your fame and fortune are all that matters to you.
But you forget.
Be careful.
Remember who you really are.

As you go higher and higher
You feel good.
You feel respected.
You ignored your friends,
and you hurt them bad.
Be careful,
because sometimes you don't remember who you are.

When you realize you're falling,
It's far too late.
You want to break free; escape.
But you can't, huh?
You should've thought about that.
You should have listened


Remember Yourself.

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 3, 2008

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    Very insightful, I like the message in this piece. I often think it is not so much as forgetting who were are, but where we came from. We get a feeling like the past is beneath us, when in reality it helped mold us into who we are. Finding oneself is an ever changing battles, but well worth it. Excellent piece.


  • creationsfromheart
    December 30, 2007
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    wow you have this in a lot of contest

    good luck!


  • InMyFlames
    December 23, 2007
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    i can really relate to this i thankyou for entering


  • transit
    December 9, 2007

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    wow!

    I am awed by the seriousness yet matter-of-fact in this piece. It is beautiful!

    the poem reminded me of celebrities and how this seems their life. We also get caught up sometimes and I felt when you became a chairman, you changed too but now, I simply think you have become even better than before and are such a wonderful friend to have. I really do. I am so glad to have friends and a very powerful message here.

    • Walk-Free
      December 21, 2007
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      yea, sometimes celebs have it bad with the meida and all..

      but if anyone surrounds him/her with good friends, he/she will never fall (:


  • Griswold
    November 25, 2007

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    Very well written for this contest, an excellently done and flowing poem. Well done here to grab up an HM...Scott


  • DrunkenRam
    November 17, 2007

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    Mark Twain Said: You don't have to remember much if you never lie, (Or something like that).
    This poem lashes out, I like it, it is curt and to the point.
    I hope to see more of your work in my contests in the future.


  • DrunkenRam
    November 13, 2007
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    Guilty ( Everybody"s Guilty)

    Thanks for entering my contest< I will be commenting when it is over. Good Luck!


  • BeautifulFlame
    November 6, 2007

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    wow! This was really great!
    I think you hit the nail on the head with this poem,it's really a shame when people forget who they are or where they came from!
    I think its great when people rise up and better themselves but sad when they leave their friends and act better than others.
    Perfect read for anyone, teens i hope read this,being a mom of teens i see this happen alot.
    Great work!
    ~Lisa~

    • Walk-Free
      November 7, 2007
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      OMGOSH
      First of, I have to say that I love your poems!
      I am so honoured that you commented on my poem (:
      Thanks a lot! <3


  • DolphinLass silver member
    November 6, 2007
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    wow very well written good luck


  • Artistic-Soul
    November 6, 2007

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    DAMN

    i am impressed
    i like this
    i like this alot
    this has a powerful message and an icredible flow and passion OH OH OH the passion just burning blazing through every word OH YES!!!
    thank you for entering this in my contest

    • Walk-Free
      November 7, 2007
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      thank you for the comment
      And yea! Thanks for taking the effort to use such nice words to describe my poem (:
      CHEERS


  • checkmate
    October 30, 2007

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    wow, vanessa. this is one of my faves from you! I truly loved this piece. This has a nice rhythm to it- sounds like lyrics to me

    The message was awesome, loved the depth of this piece. I loved the ending the very best. hehe- you sound dictatorial in the last two lines hehe, I am gonna remember myself I'll be too scared of you if I dont lol

    the flow was great and the structure was awesome!! oh my...this was just simply amazing!!!


    loved it!

    • Walk-Free
      November 7, 2007
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      i've decided to reply to all of the great comments i get
      it's good to know that my poems have rhythm and flow in them because i may just compile some into a song (:

  • pozo
    October 30, 2007
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    Good society poem. This was such a true write.

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