A knee pressed against another
Shoulders touching
The crackle of electricity
Easy conversation
Lips brush cheek
Legs across a lap
Relaxed and secure
Hand weaves through hair
Anticipation with out anxiety
Lips brush lips
Fingers trailing spine
Legs entwine
Arms encircle
Passion ignites in total comfort
Lips brush neck
Hand clasps hand
Bodies tremble
Mouths sigh
Dreams encroach as dawn arises
Lips brush cheek
Author notes
This was a little hard for me - It's a little personal in a direction I don't usually go...and it's a new relationship.
A contest entry
- BIG POINTS FOR LOVE, PASSION AND SEDUCTION! by freebutsafe.
1800 points, ended November 17, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I think it's....well, horny! lol. I'm so sorry to be judging this contest so late...I really have been so busy. I read this briefly awhile ago, and it sent sexuality my way. Thanks! Good luck in this contest and thank-you for entering.
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Very well wrote i thought great piece for something you r not use to writin about
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This is beautiful, and you have set such passion on fire....Ugh, it is just amazing!!
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Ah, craving the touch of a loved one. How well can I relate! How well can any human being relate. It is a universal topic and yet so personal. You have explored it well, painting a beuatiful moment into the mind of the reader. Thank you for sharing this and I hope you keep sharing. Best of luck!
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Great poem
I could really feel what you said and understand the passion in it.. keep up the great work
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That was a very inticing poem so full of passion, I could feel and see what you were writing about. Very vivid imagery you have painted with your words. Greta job.
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in line 5 'bush' should be 'brush'
speaking of that line... ending each stanza with 'lips brush...' really works! it ties the poem together. using 'lips brush cheek' to end the first and last stanza showed the complete circle of love
way to go!
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Thank You!
Thanks so much for catching my typo! It's fixed now - That WAS NOT at all what I meant, and it really changed the tone of that first stanza. Thank you!
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I am not a fan of erotica. I save that for bedroom secrets. You might want to label it "adult" in the title, so the readers won't waste your featured points by clicking on it, thinking it might be about another subject.
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That's why the poem was labeled as "EROTICA" It's not adult because it's not graphic.
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A good seducing poem. One feels like that in relationship. One longs for it. the thirst generated can not be quenched without that loving touch..well written
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very good poem!! You did a great and wonderful job with it! I love the way it was written!!!!!! I hope everything works out in you new relationship!! take care and have a blessed day!
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I'm guessing here but the last line of your first stanza is probably a little more personal than you intended. Brush has an R in it.
But for a died in the wool rhyme lover like myself this is a very pleasant read, the sort of breathless dissociated thoughts that new love brings
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good write innocent flirting we never know where it will take us...but its fun ...
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This is deep and raw and hot. I like it to no end!
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