Brooding, lonely feelings
Dreary, dismal sky
Emptiness is my companion
Tears, my alibi
Bleak precipitation
Creeping on the pane
Whispered dreams are my affliction
Creeping through my veins
Sleek discretion trickles
Cold ambition drips
With a frigid realization
Like rain across my lips
A contest entry
- prompts, prompts, and more prompts!!!! :] by jayyniecakes..
800 points, ended February 3, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Excellent
This is very strong and has a wonderful feel (sound) to it.
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what did you just realize?
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I quite like this little snippet here
you have a subject matter that quite some people write about, but you definately managed to stay out of the cliched side 
and that's good 
I actually was longing to read more when I finished the second (and last) stanza. It doesn't feel finished to me, but that's just my opinion
You did quite good on this!
Leander
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