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Knocking on Heaven's door

Its me Jesus Rheea...

will you send an angel please

to walk with me and keep me safe

to dwell upon mount Everest

May I see what you have made?

It must be so beautiful there

Thank you Lord

I will dress warm

be waiting by the door.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Lyndon gold member
    November 25, 2007
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    Unfortunately, dear poet

    you have written nine lines instead of twelve.
    You have written quaintly in a positive sense.
    The verse is almost, but not quite, a shape poem.
    Leave your poem here for the enjoyment of others!
    Thank you for entering.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.


  • stavykm gold member
    November 25, 2007
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    So Cute

    The faith of a child is what I heard in this poem, so pure and perfect!! The title Knocking On Heaven's Door. Then the first line It's me Jesus Rhea, then your last line I will be waiting by the door. Excellent, sweet write of poetry!! Thank you for sharing with me your poem. Blessings to you!
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm