Life leads to an unmistakable conclusion
There are no signs, (except those which the joker plays),
there is no God, no point to pray,
only silence as your words bounce off the walls,
like the tree that falls in the middle of the forest,
and no one hears...
No supernatural signs, no God to hear,
only life lessons, the people you're near,
and whatever 'tricks' your psych comes up with
to get you through each day without fear.
There's the good you see around you,
people doing their best to get through life,
and there's the absence of good,
people with intentions as cut throat as a knife.
Another unmistakable conclusion
there's no escape from death,
silent living death, or final death,
death: the only existence we are required to endure;
perception, and pain, being misunderstood,
and helplessly watching as life never unfolds as it should.
Author notes
The realist saddest truest poem I have ever written.
Please tell me what you think
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A very humanistic view of the world . . . a poem that is direct and progresses well. This poem creates a mood of hopelessness . . . like life is purely incidental. A sad supposition.
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Amazing!
A fantastic write, best of luck in the contest! -
I really like that you haven't censored your feelings here. This write is very pure and real. I think with a little more experience and the inclusion of more poetic devices you can really make a remarkable poem. Good job and good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for your awsome comment and encouragement. I think it is one of the most encouraging comments I have recieved on here. I mean I appreciate all my friends, and all comments, but your's really said something, and gave me direction. Please feel free to say more if you have any ideas. I think I would like to rewqork this! Thanks again!
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I think you did a great job here. You expressed yourself well. What I liked most about this write is you are letting go. You are saying what you think. Your usage of raw material and deep feeling.
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. . . Uhhhhh you didn't follow the rules. . . you didn't even tell me which option you used. . . I like the poem but you need to put the option or i will delete. . .
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wow...
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I guess that means you liked it. I would give you stars for your comment if I could! Duana
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