Part one (from Of Walls and War):
Dusted paint shards, clinging to the splinters
of musty run-up walls, screaming "fall out".
Hanging paintings of before, we're living
the afterlife, prompted in hollow faith.
Inject nails, pound rust through thick concrete thoughts,
piercing gently molded insulation.
Duct tape masks hide slits, curves, and crevices
wedged within a nation's faulty wiring.
Blankets of monotonous rouge colors,
enclosing memories in silent forts.
Part two:
Name: Tiffany
User-name: Sanity-Day10 (or from before, imacrazyface101)
Age: 13
Part three: I started writing about 6 months ago, mostly when I joined this site. I started out extremely cliche and not even worth anything, but as I made friends on here and was given some much needed criticism, I grew to love letting people see through my eyes in poetry. A lot of people argue my work is too confusing, that is how life is for me. I don't know a lot, not enough to make it clear, atleast not yet. I'm complicated, most of us are, but poetry encourages simplicity.
Part four: Being an amateur (that's almost an understatement), I hope this contest can give me more rhythm, a way to space out what I know and want to portray, and the ability to state the obvious in a poetic manner.
Good luck judging. :D
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Teen Idol 6: Auditions by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended October 30, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Yes
Great image and use of symbolism and metaphors.
I think the poem lacks sentence variety and could use some polish with the line breaking... besides those two things, this is very nice and shows potential. Thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest.
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