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Formication (Magnans' Sign)

Cursed cacophony auditory strain
precisely carved words regurgitated,
crossbow tense tongue stretched back
ready to unfurl a new volley of
hateful intentions, disguised in
ambiguous veils honed razor sharp,
designated intent:

maximum pain; minimal clarity.

Confusion compounds the killing floor
lowering emotion even to depths unfurled,
left blank yet to demonic rage alone-
portal key to all that is red and black,
all that smears or smudges
is unlocked beyond this gateway;
formication fathers freedom from fears
one step begets the Temple of Set.

Placid skin pageants peel back
layers lying under the loathing,
volatile vicissitudes produce
predictably profane vulgarities,
itching, crawling skin carved into
a carnival of tactile orgasms.

Eloquent ritual stabbing
love in vein leading,
anger gallops gruesomely in;
buzzkill defies explanation
yet again one simple moment
of bliss unreasonably denied.

Taboo and tainted trust
becomes me, all I am is
unspeakable evil yet more...
While I lose all sensation
numbing myself to society
paralysis stalemates my heart,
emotions oscillate away from
the necrosis of a peeled soul.

Author notes

Author: Grimoire
OPTION 4::_pain.

Formication = a tactile hallucination in which there is a sensation of tiny insects crawling over/under the skin; most commonly seen in cocaine or amphetamine intoxication. Called also Magnan's sign.

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  • spot49
    May 5, 2008
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    This is a great poem
    You worded it very well
    It has also touched me very well!
    BRAVO!!


  • vici377
    March 29, 2008

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    maximum pain; minimal clarity.
    all I am is
    unspeakable evil yet more


    emotions oscillate away from
    the necrosis of a peeled soul.

    wow..just some of the lines that really grab me..wow..no wonder you won gold..wow..imagery and flow are amazing..your alliteration rocks..and fits in like a glove..thanx so much for sharing..blessings..namaste..


  • GoodKnightPoet
    December 14, 2007

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    Thank you for the notes, but I still don't understand this poem. I'm sorry! Looks like you have an extensive vocabulary.


  • Menace
    November 30, 2007
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    Very interesting

    Some parts seem to zoom over my head, but quickly I was placed back on track. I remember having stints of formication (not realizing it had a name) back when I was using. After reading the author's notes this piece became even more profound. Excellent Job!


    • Grimoire
      December 31, 2007
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      Thanks. Yeah, I spent the last 15+ years destroying everything human about myself (retired musician). I am only 38 but have the body of a senior citizen....well, it feels like it, at least. And I am a BIT shot out physically, my mind has sporadic moments of incredible sanity in between my ill begotten reality spells...

      beware the worms,
      homewrecker


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    November 19, 2007
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    Wow. Wow. I don't even know where to begin. This is such a fantastic poem, definitely deserving of the shiny gold trophy that was awarded you.
    The word usage that was incorporated into the poem was amazing. You selected some very intriguing words. I don't think I could have come up with something half this amazing for that prompt. Wow.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Mallig gold member
    November 11, 2007
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    Brilliant, you are a constant amazement, poet. This is so dark and so real and painful to read, because of the immediacy of the imagery and description. Again, amazing use of language and educational as well. Very glad to have read this powerful piece, you are among the best I have read on this site.


  • PerfectImperfection
    November 11, 2007

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    This is possibly one of the most powerful pieces I have ever read, from you - or anyone for that matter. The depth beneath these intricate lines of expression, resonates. So very prolific in such a masterful way. To have the ability to pen something so defined and pained...
    Jaded ruins of perplexity, sometimes become us all.
    I really enjoyed this, I would have liked to outline a favorite verse, but I would have to repost the entire write. Brilliant, raw, and truly amazing.

  • DonutNinja
    November 10, 2007
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    Cool sounding stuff

    you woudnt want to much of this kind of thing, but I dont think in and of themselves anything this poem is about is bad,save for self mutilation, though I did get kind of a disturbed feeling, I think it was maximun pain and minimal clarity.Formication always sucks. anyway this poem is awesome.good job.


  • gcpirelli
    November 10, 2007

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    Great work, really dark and brings the imagery to life. The emotion of the poem jumps off the page at you and demands to be experienced. I enjoyed the well written piece.


  • AndreaChanel
    October 30, 2007

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    seems like you definitely took time to vividly & creatively express the pain of having this disease. the picture also defintiely gives the reader an image to think of when reading this. good luck!

    • Grimoire
      October 31, 2007
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      Yes, unfortunately I have personal experience with which to draw on in regards to this subject. The picture was an overexaggeration I purposely used it so that it would immediately give the theme of the poem.

  • Acidanthra
    October 30, 2007
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    I feel that this poem is right on target. Amazing word usage and imagery. But most important, you portrayed the perfect physical, mental, and spiritual image of what emotional leprosy would be. Emotions affect not only feelings, yet everything around and inside of us. Awesome job on this write!!

    • Grimoire
      October 31, 2007
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      Thanx. This one actually has a lot of meaning interwoven within it, ambiguities that I put in that follow the theme but speak to personal experience.
      bye,
      homewrecker

  • Bob Fox
    October 30, 2007

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    Some call it partying

    I call it death. Sadly I have , as a kid, seen more die from drugs then from war. even more sader, i think, is that so many so called grownups are into it.

    • Grimoire
      October 31, 2007
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      Yes , very sad indeed. It is a slow death and there are many casualties in between the users, the enablers, and those caught in between. "So called grownups", I like how you put that, it pretty much says it all.
      bye,
      HW


  • LoveSpell-PurpleRose silver member
    October 30, 2007

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    Full Of Intence Emotion's !

    I really like .One step begets the Temple Of Set. As well as Unspeakable evil yet more.And While I Lose All Sensationnumbing myself to society.~~~~~~~LoveSpell-PurpleRose~~~~~~~

    • Grimoire
      October 31, 2007
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      Yes, thank you. It is full of intense emotions, for me, none more intense than those. The temple of Set is a reference to an organization which represents Pure Evil, it was a metaphorical comparison.


  • Day Star
    October 30, 2007

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    Nice write

    You have captured the horrifying image of using drugs.
    Oh, what a horrible experience to go through, yet they still use it. I just don't understand.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 29, 2007

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    You went to the true heart of the matter with this one, I think, very descriptive Good luck in the contest

    • Grimoire
      October 30, 2007
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      Thanx I went a little darker, and free verse with this one. Not like most of my other stuff, no rhymes, per se.....glad you still liked it.

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