Drinking and dreaming,
My little heart beats on.
And on.
And on.
And on...
Whip the razor in my back,
Cut the chord that binds my mind.
One fuck, two fucks, three fucks, four.
Apathy, apathy, all comes down.
Such a pretty little liar,
Such a pretty little face.
Let's cut it all to ribbons!
In her blood we'll play our silly games.
Why are you trying to make fun of me?
Is this shit funny, what you see become of me?
I will raise you, and I will let you fall...
Go tumbling, tumbling; the sunlight and all
"Hail Mary, full of grace..."
(children giggling in the darkness)
"Grace under pressure, grace under fire...
Grace's soul on a funeral pyre...
What shall you do, with my eyes all sniffled and red?
Why, beat them and beat them! Until little Luci is dead..."
(giggling)
Author notes
I was listening to Throw Me Away by Korn when I wrote this. Enough said. I was starting to write one based off of Broken, but I think this sums up the darkness that crowds outside our sanity quite nicely.
Is this real? Imagined? Or just a good-ole acid trip?
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Wicked!
This is fabulously dark. Fantastically penned, best of luck in the contest! -
WOW, very dark. I am not a Korn fan but my late husband was and my son is.
You used awesome imagery in this very creative write, it gave me gosebumps.
Even though I ( it's the mom in me) am always telling... no, screaming at my kid to "turn that shit off" I actually found this entertaing.
Excellent job!
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I was gonna say, "Reminds me of KoRn's Thoughtless", but then I noticed your notes. I haven't listened to "Throw Me Away", or haven't in a long time, so I don't think I know what it sounds like, but your use of metaphors and emotional nonsense talk creates beautiful imagery in a wonderfully dark, sadomasochistic poem.
I hate to say it (cause I hate hearing it...) but keep writing, even if only so I may read more of your works.
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I was singing Thoughtless and listening to Throw Me Away. *laughs* So we're both right.
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it was all over the shop...but in a good way, i really enjoyed the disjointedness of it, i liked the rhyme.
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this poem is so dark and well...insane....I love it! The imagery is grotesque the emotions are wild and chaotic. Love it love it!!!!
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