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Cold

Always on the outside,

Bright eyes glance through bars,
Caressing imaginations coat,

Reaching for the distance,
As the glint of hope slowly fades,
Reaching for someone to hold,

Heart impaled on the cold stone,
As the world spins life carries on,
Forgotten hands clenched cold bars,

 

Shadows linger behind her,

As her blood spills to the ground,

But she'll keep it to herself.

 

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  • ButILoveHer silver member
    June 26

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    so chilling but touching..
    it hit close to home this one...
    one of my favs so far..
    brilliant write ^_^

  • allena1966
    November 2, 2007

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    Shadows linger behind her,
    As her blood spills to the ground,
    But she'll keep it to herself.

    Sounds a lot like depression. Depression is it’s own little prison. You did this well.


  • Amera gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    Wow! You opened your closet and chose the cloak of the dark genre and you wear it well. Fantastic and captivating image.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Myjoy gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    Wow this is deep, very moving I must add too.
    You did a wonderful job with this piece, the picture
    is great too, the idea you got of it is brilliant.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    October 29, 2007

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    A very deep poem.
    There is always something that is just out of reach for us. The hardest one for me, was when my own happiness was just out of reach and I had to find the way to get it back. I am glad I did.

    I really felt this emotional poem and really liked ---

    Reaching for the distance,
    As the glint of hope slowly fades,
    Reaching for someone to hold,

    Job well done with pulling the reader in




  • Lesslikeyou
    October 29, 2007

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    This poem truly moved me. Far too often we keep the feelings hidden, inside. We are conditioned to "be strong" even though again far too often we need to let them go. Fantastic job. I can't wait to read more.


  • poetryality silver member
    October 29, 2007

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    This is truly sad. It seems that women have a tendency to "keep it to themselves" far too often. Sometimes we need to upchuck our feelings and let them flood from our being simply to save our own lives. I hope she gets unstuck. Excellent emotions spent here dear heart. Wow! I felt these words as if they seared my heart.


    Much Love Always ♥

    Grandma


  • TwiztidMaggot
    October 29, 2007

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    wow. this is pretty good. I like it. You have done a great job writing it!!! keep up your amazing work!!!!

    Crimson


  • Elenriel
    October 29, 2007

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    Stunned, Surprised, and Amazed!

    This poem sent shivers down my spine with its powerful ending! So dark and painful. Yet, such determination in a person...truly admirable and touching, causing heartache for that person. You did a splendid job. It started off sad and quiet, and became tragically powerful. A job very well done! Keep it up!


  • Gods-Artgal
    October 29, 2007
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    This is a sad poem. I liked it very much.

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