From the depths of inky darkness on that half remembered night
She can almost still imagine him, the very face of fright
She hopes that she will never see a more appalling sight
She doesn't want to be alone again
From deep within the shadows in the corners of her room
She can almost hear the sounds he makes emerging from the gloom
She knows that when she hears them it will spell her certain doom
She never wants to be alone again
From far outside her covers she can feel the deathly chill
That accompanies the passing of the dead or very ill
Although she should be tucked in warm, she knows that it's there still
She never should be on her own again
From far outside the solid walls that make up her little house
There a sickly sweet aroma no air freshener can douse
That's more worrying than smelling out the haunt of rat or mouse
She never wants to be in here again
From a place that she is sure that she would never want to be
She can feel a deadly presence that she knows she cannot flea
She isn't going to look for it - she doesn't want to see
She's never going to watch that film again!
A contest entry
- HALLOWEEN EXTRAVAGANZA - Open til Oct. 31st by Little Feather.
9800 points, ended November 3, 2007, 60 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please comment below. Spelling or rhyming or scanning corrections welcome.
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Thanks for your entry
My only suggestion is to take out the 'and' all of them. You don't need them. Other than that this is a good poem. Watching scary movies alone is not a good idea. They freak you out too much lol
Happy Halloween
Tammy
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I think I agree with you, I shall re-read it again both ways later and finally decide, thank-you for the suggestion.
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Never quite knowing what she will find
All sorts of images play in her mind
All of them bad, none of them kind
She'll remember next year on Halloween not to watch another scary movie, or will she???
Excellent poem, good luck in the contest
Sue
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Eerie light through window streaking
And a floorboard oddly creaking
A drip of tap that's started leaking
And still she can't remember to get the right number of syllables in the last line
:-)
Thanks a lot
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This is a great poem.
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I very much like the rhyming here!
"From far outside her covers she can feel the deathly chill
That accompanies the passing of the dead or very ill
And although she should be tucked in warm, she knows that it's there still
And she never should be on her own again"
this stanza flows very very well and goes right with halloween!!
such a enchanting write!!
--kat
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Thank-you
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wow this is really good! I loved it!
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