A mystery whispered partner of dance,
swirls me about in a promise enhanced.
Swift velvet touch of soft utterance wind,
beckons me waltz with it time and again.
A zephyr's flow of fresh air thoughts of change,
hums symphonies of old thought's rearrange.
Spinning new woven hued threads of surprise,
I'm moved by it's breathless clip it supplies.
A voice swiftly flows threw high leafy boughs,
parting the sweet grass it scurries and plows.
Imparting faint wisdom whispered on high,
dancing it looms in gusts cross a blue sky.
Entranced, in dance surrender to partner,
swirling it leads me in staged step saunter .
Author notes
This has the ten syllable count and 4 quads and a couplet. But I maybe the only one who'd call it a sonnet.
In a list
A contest entry
- gone with the wind - wind poetry by Namita.
300 points, ended November 12, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Ohhhh this is absolutely beautiful and the rhyme is not foreced. Beautiful writing.
~CAndy
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Tightly woven...the image I recognize and it still weaves a spell! Captivating rhythm and I adore how the ending echoes back the beginning. Blue
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Lovely poem which intertwines the swirling winds to a swirling waltz so well. And it's perfect for the contest-theme of "gone with the wind" too!
I'm not an expert on the sonnet-form myself, but by all accounts of what I do know of this form, this poem is perfect. I always love how you get that slant off-rhyme to feel so absolutely perfect in your writing!
Best wishes in the contest!
Jo
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Incredibly beautiful, flawless, wistful, good luck in the contest lol
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I have been staring and reading and staring and rereading and I am trying to figure out if the image was created for the words or the words for the image. The two just seem to mesh so perfectly and I find both to be quite breathtaking. You have done a beautiful job here! Thank you for sharing your words with me and best wishes to you in the contest. Keep that quill dipped in ink and ever ready for use.
♥ Touchof1der
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Hi my friend, I loved this poem smooth flow and lovely feel, all the best in the contest, hugs Di
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