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a walk that lingers

 

We drift in fickle wind
with a foretaste of wild roses,

it shakes rain from cedars

 
while underfoot, moss absorbs
truth in deep silence,

planting us firmly. 

 

Hear, know I love you -
let it grow and speak

in whispers, gently drying
scattered seeds of kisses

over your face,

and later, as we fall asleep, 

in arms like the
familiar scent of home,

 

let it hold you, let it calm you;

voiced, like musk within your hair.
































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  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    August 24, 2008

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    This is another very pretty piece.
    So much to love here, it's sweet and warm.
    Like a soft kind of love.
    Very beautiful as always

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • Swan song gold member
    February 10, 2008

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    Wow once again i stand here with mouth agape at the power of your work well done

  • silverfish
    January 8, 2008

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    this is one lovely poem with legs that go all the way down to the ground. it makes me feel like you have written with all five senses, plus one. -redphish


  • Namita
    November 12, 2007

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    TThis is just excellent. I can smell, feel, touch, sense and can delve so deep into this poem. Beautiful poetry and of course, It's Tara.

    ~Namita


  • kaibab silver member
    November 11, 2007

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    So very beautiful Ms. March...the scent of home inside the soul...sharing breath of wild and whisper...


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 7, 2007

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    I love the smell of cedar. I love the smell of rain!
    Combined you created a masterpiece in this poem that teases my senses and make me long for love as pure as the drops of heaven sitting on the moss.

    Loved this!!

    Becks


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    November 6, 2007
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    Oh, my..this brought a tear...stunning


  • elemental angel
    November 5, 2007

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    Absolutely breath-takingly beautiful, an amazing take on the prompt. I love the imagery and the whole feel of this piece. Beautiful, best of luck in the contest.
    Bravo


  • sheltered
    November 1, 2007
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    Very well done. Grabs you and holds you
    the way you want to be held.


    • tara wilson gold member
      November 1, 2007
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      aww..thanks Tim, that's an awesome comment, I was hoping this poem would have that effect


  • Tam
    October 31, 2007

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    well done!

    I was trying to come up with something for this contest but this is truly stunning.
    Great write...I love your language...it's very alluring and you have a depth in your poetic voice that leads the reader into your web of beauty...
    and I wish to remain in the web...just to view the world from your creation a little longer.
    Very well done beautiful spirit!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • Old Fool
    October 31, 2007

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    Amazing, enchanting, so soft.. so gentle..
    An easy flowing poem.. nice and gentle..
    Simply Brilliant..
    An outstanding write..
    Much Love n Hugz n All that Jazz xx Evert


  • Cup-a-Joe
    October 30, 2007
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    I never knew that musk had a voice. It must be soft,and just above a whisper.
    Joe

    • tara wilson gold member
      October 30, 2007
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      thank you Joe, I would imagine it would sound like that too.lol


  • arafura gold member
    October 30, 2007

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    a foretaste...

    Your words spin webs around my heart... I love the subtle sensual quality of the work. The structure is great and the imagery outstanding! Excellent!

    • tara wilson gold member
      October 30, 2007
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      HI! thank you very much, I am happy you enjoyed this piece


  • delightfulmess silver member
    October 30, 2007

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    I love you poetry.. It is always so sultry and seductive. Love this piece. Best of luck to you in the contest


    delila


  • Mezclita
    October 30, 2007

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    wow this is deep... I had to re-examine the intended meaning a few times to make sure I wasn't being biased and considering your write too personally, but it turns out the more I read it the more I found this to be able to be several stories in one (depending on the interpretation)... the characteristic of a good poem.

    It feels to me like what the "relationship" situation (the one i just rambled to you about) would be like if I seek to pursue it any further... like squeezing blood out of a rock or "shaking rain from cedars" & then the seeds drying away right there... nothing being planted but the unspoken truth (everything else said meaning slightly less)... yet there's your hope that this familiar feeling of comfort might just seep past his hair and register in his brain over night~ lol

    I don't know if this is where you were writing from but like I said, my interpretation... beautiful words, a clear theme you stick to throughout and surprising in each new stanza... you have all the right to be proud of this one!^^


  • Sonja
    October 30, 2007

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    Good chosen words with not too much adjectives, just a great action of - poetry. Interesting free form. The whole poem is very nice, but the first three lines are perfect.
    ~Sonja~


  • Lady Eventide
    October 30, 2007

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    Oh. My. God. This was brilliant and so...beautiful. I'm at a loss for words, but I will say something. I feel as if I need to. I love the way you use words, like a spider using its web to create wonderful pieces of art. You are most definitely an artist, with the way you paint with words, and it's always a pleasure to read what you write. Wow. Again, extremely beautiful. I feel sorry for your competition.

  • Virgoan
    October 30, 2007

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    Excellent

    I like the way you manage to give the movement of the wind intrinsically as an emotion. The way you have spoken takes the reader's breath away.

    I love everything about this. Keep penning my friend.

    HENSLEY


  • poet2angels gold member
    October 29, 2007

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    WOW!
    I love reading your poems..Its like a peek into romance and a walk in pretty park scenery...S very romantic this one is into a glimpse of sweet love! You need to keep writing cause we all love reading your wonderful poetry!

    Lynda


  • Cherokee
    October 29, 2007
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    That's very pretty.


  • aliceramone
    October 29, 2007

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    good flow and language in this beautiful write,,,perfect for the contest
    "we fall asleep in arms like the familiar scent of home"-love those lines...very well done.


  • FindingFaith
    October 29, 2007
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    absolutely beautiful.


  • Oisin silver member
    October 29, 2007

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    "and later, as we fall asleep,
    in arms like the
    familiar scent of home,"

    Very pretty lines, very warm and very comfortable. You have put this together very well.

    Great poem!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 29, 2007
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  • misselaineous
    October 29, 2007
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  • kaibab silver member
    October 29, 2007
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    The fragrance of love...Ah!!! such a lingering...nice work Ms. March...glad to see you writing...


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    October 29, 2007

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    A beautiful love poem, one that you can read over and over and find new things to appreciate every time! Good luck in the contest!


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 29, 2007

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    Oh my goodness this is a pretty poem full of depths that only a lvoer can know. It is evocative, it is beautiful...it stirs the reader....

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