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my [thank you] for a death divine

a life of pain
of regret
as i stand here, beside her
i have only 2 options

after everything i put her through
she remains by my side, even now
as you stare at us
i have only 2 options

i could never do anything right
apart from cause her pain
a wicked smile across your face
...2 options

i've lived my life secluded
running away from her touch
you mentally make a choice
only 2 things i can do

i never said i loved her
and i never showed i cared
as i see that you chose her
..i have only one option

i chose to take her bullet
to give her the gift of life
and know, she knows i cared all along
that i loved her more than anything
actions speak louder than words,

thank you for your bullet
thank you for my death

************

a life of pain,
of regret
as i stand here, beside him
he has only 2 options

after everything he put me through
i stand by his side, his hand in mine
as you stare at me
he has 2 options

he thought he couldn't do anything right
he thought he caused me pain
your smile drips with pleasure
...2 options

i lived my life trying
trying to get you to realize i love you no matter what
you made your choice, and i know what it is
what will he do?...

he never said he loved me,
showed me he cared, but i could always see it in his eyes
he sees that you chose me
his eyes tell me what he will do

he chose to take my bullet
to let me carry on
i tell him i always knew he cared
that his eyes told me he loved
"actions speak louder than words"
he says

he drifts away to nothingness
but in my heart he will remain

********

*Whispers*"ILoveYou"

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Author notes

this might not be exactly what you were looking for
but it's about a couple, a boy and a girl
the boy always had trouble expressing his love, and he knew that he was hurting her, he knew that he was a bad boyfriend
and he finds himself in a 'her or me' situation...and he chooses her, the only thing he ever does to show he loves her, he expressed his love for her in death like he never could in live
he was ashamd of the way he treated her, so he can die with dignity and pride, knowing for the first time he did something for her

p.s
it is written for the person that killed him

the first part, is his perspective
and the second hers

the last part..the single line *whispers*"iloveyou*
they both say simultaneously...him in heaven, her on earth.

it's a mirroring effect..you write 2 parts. normally opposite, with same kind of wording etc etc
it's really for stories..but hey...

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  • PureRomance
    November 20, 2007

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    This is a very beautiful poem. Congrats to you in winning gold and HM for this in previous contests. Please feel free to add me to your favs as I will then do the same. God bless you in all that you do and I write and I look forward to reading more from you while this contest is still going on. You did a very magnificent job with this piece. Good luck to you and your poem in my contest.


  • lesbian-in-love silver member
    October 30, 2007

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    That was nicely done. Though it was not quite what I was looking for I shall keep it anyways. Thanks for entering this fine piece into the contest.


  • I will stand by you
    October 30, 2007

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    this was great. touching write, it is true that actions speak louder than words but she could see how he felt in his eyes. great job and good luck.