The wind whips through the trees, and my hair.
Your breath on my neck, it's so hard not to give in.
But baby, we're moving way too fast
and I need to know that you mean it this time.
I need to hear you say that you love me
and that you'll take me tonight. I'll be yours forever.
I don't want to throw myself away,
but the voice inside is screaming, 'let loose'.
Like a Mustang on the freeway, it's full speed ahead
and it's far too late now, to hit the brakes...
Author notes
A little Meatloaf-inspired ditty... Can you guess the song???
In a list
A contest entry
- Round 2 of 5 - Speedy Round - 30 will advance - Invite ONLY by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended October 31, 2007, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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yeah, I'm old enough to remember when that song by Meatloaf came out new. It was a fun ditty, your poem takes it more serious, which of course the topic really is.
Now you'll have me singing that thing all night and singing both parts, male and female.
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This poem really deserved the Gold it got in the coontest you entered it in. But i ??? why you endded it with.....just curious, the poems great.
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I ended it that way because of the prompt... I didn't want it to be about speed in the literal sense, but rather a metaphor for taking it slowly in relationships... A la Meatloaf
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Awesome job~ I luv the way you took the prompt and used it in reference to a love relationship~ this is more of what I was looking for not necessarily poems about the tunnel... or speed... but I really didn't want to discourage the writes about that cause you just never know~ I do think there are a lot of people who jump into relationships without thinking, or even perpetuated into a relationship they may not really want. ~ Your write was well said~ I did enjoy the different outlook on the piece~
..... my guess is "Paradise by the dashboard light" or... if I can have to I'll do anything for love.... which is one of my fav's....
Congrats to making it to round 2 ~ good luck to you! -
This is filled with such descriptive expression and steeped in emotion. I love line 10 "Like a Mustang", such vivid visuals here. I'll eat my bra if you don't make it through to Round 3, this is surely deserving of recognition. Loved it! Love you more though
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