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Misty Dreams [Sedoka]

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Dark blue misty tears
Brings on pain awakening soul
as passion seeks to hide out

Brown eyes deja vu
Two hearts designed for love
Falling into midnight dreams

Author notes

The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following syllable counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7. A Sedoka, pair of katauta as a single poem, may address the same subject from differing perspectives.

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  • lustfulviolets
    November 6, 2007

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    I like this poem. Great write. We love only in dreams again and again. Love in real too I hope. great write


  • Mykeee
    October 29, 2007

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    This was great. the color contrast was cool. Dark blue tears and brown eyes. Two thoughts with different views.
    Be careful, there are some Sedoka haters out here. I ran into one. good work mom!!


  • Brazos silver member
    October 29, 2007

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    Nicely done, Novy

    Beautiful form poetry here, I completely forgotten about Sedokas, until you published this one.

    I especially liked the second katauta [smiles].

    I love you,
    Brazos