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on the wind

i know the difference now
between an empty wind
and one which carries your name
for i have sent the wind to speak to you

of the feeling of a soft night breeze
that touched your face,
like soft falling petals;

and the gentle kiss of near still air
on heavy warm nights, when i wish to
reach close to your ear,
send love on my breath.

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  • tara wilson gold member
    August 8
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    this is so gorgeous.


  • Namita
    November 12, 2007

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    Oh wow. This is truly exquizite, PK. Beautifully written with so much. So much it has in it.

    ~Candy


  • April Renee
    October 29, 2007
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    lovely. enjoyed. good luck in the contest.

    blu


  • Mallig gold member
    October 29, 2007

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    These well penned words do truly convey the wind and its softest touch, and as a lovely metaphor, a great piece, best of luck in the contest!


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    October 29, 2007

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    Oh that gentle kiss of near still air


    man this is a poignant write.. I have sent along every sense and stil...I wait to feel it back.


  • midnight eyes
    October 29, 2007
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    very good.




    Amber


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 29, 2007

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    Such a soft and gentle sigh of a poem this is...lovely, lovely. It somehow reminds me of a poem I've written years ago and you make me want to go dig it up again. The breezes that lift and embrace and the warm breaths that whisper... it's all here.

    ~ Nicolette

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