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free

I broke free today,
not broken spirited, but like the waves crashing against the rocks.
Free of mind,
not from an apology, but from myself.
Free from thoughts I catered too,
tantalizing fears that I fed my emotions.
Free

 

Relief floods me, overwhelms me and burdens me,
the lead unto my feet.
Relief not for the reasons his eyes pleaded forgiveness,
but relief for my heart with such a burden lifted.
Chains I so often and tenderly spoke of,
link by link shattered, by my own forgiveness.
My mind cleared the fog as I forgave myself,
for hurting because I was hurt to long, and longing because I was hurting.
Dwelling on insistent memories,
things that died with the wind of yesterdays memoirs.

 

A distant memory I hope this becomes,

how did I ever chain myself, with myself?

Such confusion overwhelms me,

but those are thoughts for another day.

Tonight,

I am Free.

Author notes

I waited after countless hurtful spiteful words thrown against me by my own blood, my heart pounding for the love that was never there, thrown aside so far that when he finally said sorry, I realized I could accept his appology but not him, but I also more importantly needed to forgive myself.

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  • vanessa lez
    December 23, 2008
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    amazing:]. very powerful and fresh.


  • HeartTangles
    October 18, 2008

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    Breaking free does have that affect and at times we are our own worst enemy. We mull things over and try to be what everyone expects us to be and forget what we (ourself) wants or needs, that inner battle can tear you apart. It is always best to be honest with yourself but is is not as easy as it sound. Yes. Break those chains and cast them into the sea never to be self bound again. Excellent Expression

  • Godslayer
    March 11, 2008

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    i know how u feel i have done some things that have hurt my family and i have to live with the fact of what i have done thanks 4 sharing this made my day

    . Rewarded 4


  • scentedrose
    March 10, 2008

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    I feel this immensly

    It feel's like something that I would write.
    Course you may not see such posted here as I am preparing for publishing through contests and they don't like it when you pre-post your work with anyone else including sites like this.

    I loved this.

    . Rewarded 4


  • melphleg gold member
    March 7, 2008

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    This is true. We are chained by our own guilt and shame. We need to forgive ourselves in order to be free of that chain.
  • NotTheDroids
    March 6, 2008

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    I have a daughter I would like to read this poem, it says so much about gettingo ut from under and being yourself.

    Well done, this poem will also help with the freedom.



    NTD

  • Grannyrosie
    March 5, 2008

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    Powerful, energising

    Your pen has taken this reader into the depths of your despair and to recovery, no mean feat. Well done poet.
    Blessings, love 'n hugs, Tricia

    . Rewarded 4


  • Sinnastarr silver member
    March 3, 2008

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    This is a very good write. You presented your thoughts quite well here. There is a lot of emotion behind your words. I was hooked till the very last line.
    Well done Poet.
    Keep up the good writing.

  • Elle Kaye
    March 3, 2008

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    Fantastic, Simply superb. Beautiful, charming, emotive, thought provoking. A true poetic masterpeice. I also loved the last ttwo lines.
    Well done,

  • stylization
    February 29, 2008

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    this is so beautiful, so deep, and there's so much to it. it's very descriptive and i love the way you did the last two lines.

  • Barely Breathing gold member
    February 25, 2008

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    This is such a great poem with so much depth and meaning. You have done well here to paint such a vivid picture for the reader on how you were feeling. WEll done.

  • tarcus
    February 19, 2008
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    we are never really free unfortunately something/someone always drags us back to reality

  • Rei-G
    February 18, 2008
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    great

    that was really good I love it

  • chasingtheday gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    it is good to let go and soar the skies of ourselves in freedom's bliss, we can never let ourselves chain ourselves for too long or we will never rise up and find the light of smiles that spin the world towards the future. a good poem.
  • Musiccisum
    February 16, 2008
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    you are free...everything about this poem says it

  • Blooming Poet
    February 15, 2008

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    The kind of free you describe here, is so powerful. I can feel a huge burden being lifted from you it I can really relate to this powerful and moviing poe
  • know one
    February 13, 2008
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    .......speach less

    amazing
    usually I don't like free vurse much
    but I LOVE this
    great write!!!!!

  • Blue Spirit
    February 13, 2008
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    wow! this is beautiful. i love the poem and the imagery in it. thanks for sharing.


  • kira1115
    February 11, 2008

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    Wow, the way this makes me feel. Like you I am awaiting an appology that may never occur. (But you got yours.)

  • Emily Ankrom
    February 9, 2008
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    AH! I read this and I instantly felt my
    troubles again, but then I read more
    and they just melted away. Wow.

    You're right, sometimes we need to apologize to
    ourselves for letting this happen. And then
    we can't always accept apologies because we know
    it isn't actually real. But anyways, this was a great
    poem.

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  • Kari gold member
    February 9, 2008

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    Being free is such a wonderful feeling It's sad that there are some people to never experience this. I am glad that you did and wrote a poem to encourage other people hopefully that there is more in life!

    . Rewarded 4


  • Polaja Greeters member
    February 7, 2008
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    This is a wonderful poem... there were a couple of things that I picked up - 'catered too' should be 'to' and 'hurt to long' should be 'too'... apart from that this is a brilliant recognition of your own strength I really enjoyed finding this poem

    Keep writing

    Polly

  • RhiannonClare
    February 7, 2008

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    This was obviously an important poem for you to write. In my experience, forgiving myelf was and is the hardest part of any quarrel, trauma or bad situation. I can really relate to this poem and I appreciate you sharing it with us.
    "Dwelling on insistent memories,
    things that died with the wind of yesterdays memoirs."

    this was my favourite line, I find myself doing this all too often.
    A genuine, thoughtful poem.
  • pruedence
    February 7, 2008
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    This is a great thing that you have realized. Life is tricky and you have to know how to protect yourself with out turning into the same person that is hurting you. Appology and sorry are the hard parts of life..but we must reconize them and put them aside to go forth in our life. Your words many will relate to..well done, thanks for sharing

  • child of grace
    February 5, 2008

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    Freedom sounds amazing when you put it like this.
    A wonderful piece that flowed so well and spoke perfecty to the absolute truth that one needs to forgive themselves for their mistakes and move on.
    Beautiful.
    Cheers!
    S

  • Luminescence
    February 3, 2008

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    oh.... wow this was great. I really liked it and I connected with it in so many ways.... The words just flow off the page and into your heart. Wonderfull, simply wonderful......

    ~Lumin

  • poetryality silver member
    January 30, 2008

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    Freedom comes from within. First to free one's self is the beginning of the new pathway to a life of liberty. Your words flow effortlessly poet. There are those in my past that wielded hurt and pain, before I could ever see them forgiven I had to look at my part in the situation, if indeed I played no part then, it was truly them I needed to forgive. You have done some soul-searching and come out on top. Way up there where eagles soar. Good for you. Thanks for this feature, it reminds me that forgiveness is the key that breaks all chains.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee
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