Lo, the meek shall inherit the Earth,
And what a dusty jewel shall it be.
Lo, his soul shines upon the World,
And the mass wears sunglasses.
Lo, nothing is as it seems,
And yet all is what it is.
Author notes
I'll be the first to admit that this will never be considered the greatest of poetry, or even the best of my works. Still, I feel that the length and context fi the picture quite nicely. Additionally, this poem also has the talent of being able to stand away from the picture, which is something that does not always come to pass with the picture inspired poetry.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Freestyle Bushido.
450 points, ended October 31, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think, what do you feel?
Comments
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Nice. I like the border (which is intricate like your poem). Kudos for the understanding of the way the Earth is. I like "Lo, his soul shines upon the world/And yet the masses wears sun glasses." But I believe the correct grammar is "the masses wear sun..." Because "wear" has no "s" when there's more than one being, in this case the "masses." If you say "the mass wears sun glass..." then that would be right, too.
sorry, I got all nit-picky-like. Anyway, have fun, and
God Bless
Little One
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Yes I totally agree with you in your authors notes. This poem is very inspirational and deep, I can tell this has some bibilical influence in it. Also like you said this could stand alone away from the picture as well. all in all I think this is fine write. thank you for entering.
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