She writes her shadow
with shimmered, morning branch,
her eastern rise, an artistic sand storm,
fingering innocence through earthen parchment,
page blown by sage
in fragrant stage of growing closer.
Memory grooves through looser ground,
thinking back in waves of childhood
between those gaps of love-lost canyons
moving soul, as syncopated middle.
What swirls do strokes become--
as pools in dust, reflecting more
than reddened walls of desert's schooled resistance,
within our strengths
of spirit, spent in lengths
climbing rigid, caverned rock to summit
till wind will out and conquer introspection's
plummeting ghost?
It is the need to give in innocence,
one small wave gushing from the source,
trickling back to blissful beginning,
so in our bending low,
to kiss the earth
we feel the freshness of favored birth
when spring does ring our closer echoes.
And what glories spark, when that fresh song,
(etched now as colored trench upon pressed glass)
leaps, as hart,
upon the kindling soul of another
whose tongue despairs
for aging want of blessed drink?
She sighs inside rhetorical revelation,
wandering glance to secret's service,
that child is wilder cry of universe
than rancid sage
of raging wisdom,
looking up in billowed laughter,
her portrait scored in mother's locket.
In a list
A contest entry
- Pair Me A Poem III - final - Invite Only by CarolDesjarlais.
3000 points, ended October 29, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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And to kabib who always leaves me with my mouth agape. I love this! I had no idea this was a collaborative effort until after I posted the comment above. That makes it all the better.
Renee
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The language and imagery here is stunning. To go back to that childhood that is ever-present in the mind and find such gifted thought is memorizing. This is a brilliant work of poetry poet. It is no wonder that these words garnered the Silver cup. Absolutely beautiful. You have shined poetically here. I enjoyed each stanza and anticipated the next.
Congratulations on your win and your ability to captivate the reading audience.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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beautiful! such vivid imagery... such a striking contrast between some of the softer visualizations brought to my mind and some of the harsher wording, it works quite well in this piece... a wonderful collaboration! I can read both of your influences in this piece!
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Oh this was so well the wait.... congratulations both of you on overcoming technology to get this beautiful piece poemed.
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