I bow before him, trembling, terror racing through me
Turning the liquid in my veins into cold blue ice
Frozen, head low touching the ground heated by the red-orange
Flames leaping off his smoldering heated breath
I dare take a glance into cool gray eyes, receiving a frost biting blast
For my troubles, captivated I can't bare to part gazes
With this powerful creature, in wolf form, enticing as he is deadly,
Tail of a serpent following behind as he begins to pass
Back and forth as the four times ten Legions of spirits
He is lord over wait in strained silence as he considers my request
Finally he comes to a slow pause in front of me
And with a great howl the fur covering his massive body
Dissipates his body straitening standing tall
His muscled form magnificent and on his broad muscular shoulders
The head of raven, he places his hands at the side of my face
And begins to gaze into my eyes, suddenly falling
Into a pitch black pit of oblivion I land hard
Abruptly in a sunny field of flowers.
He gracefully nods his dark feathered head
Toward the small wood cottage across the wildly growing fields
A young woman stands on the front porch,
Lovingly rubbing her rounded belly, glowing with a knowing smile, content.
He grabs my hand, pulling me away, interrupting my thoughts,
I gaze in to his eyes and realize that our journey has ended
My request granted, he has shown me what I wished to see...my destiny.
Author notes
I chose the demon Aamon
A contest entry
- Angels && Demons by SpydurPoet.
450 points, ended November 6, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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When I entered this poem I was a bit scared of the long lines punched up together (am more accustomed to stanzas), but when I started reading it, the flow was amazing the it was rather easy to read.
And the poem itself...
Amazing imagery! I could see this opening in front of my eyes and it was so beautiful! Such a strong and deep poem filled with such beauty that doesn't go unnoticed by anyone, I believe. This one truly deserved the gold! Beautiful work!
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great piece, strong imagery, well deserving of that gold trophy.
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A very powerful write this was and sent a chill down my spine as I read it. I can see why it won gold and I congratulate you for it. Your words were intense and filled with such dark images which was exactly what they should have done. I can still feel a tingling inside, that type when the hairs on your body stand up in fear. Thank you for sharing this with me. It was an excellent piece. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥
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this is a powerful poem. great job. I enjoyed reading this, thank you for sharing it with me.
kathy
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Stunnimg Visuals
The visuals you created with this were magnificant..one could visualize each point in time througout the poem which flowed well, compelling you to follow through to teh end. Well written,
Evan
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Indeed different from what I am used too...but I love the concept of this write. Great job and thanks for sharing with us.
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very interesting poem good job.
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Wow, amazing imagery and use of imagination. Very well written. Well done on that gold, definitely well deserved.
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You started this out so well... I liked "Turning the liquid in my veins into cold blue ice "
This had a great story, that kept me interested from beginning to end! Write on!
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Annnnd...BOOM. Sound the applause. You did a fantastic job on this and it is clear that you did your research for it. Thank you very much for entering the contest and best of luck!
Write on.
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