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A Goth childs Dead Time Story (Hansel and Gretel) Pt 4

"Hansel brother..." Gretel said.
"Please do wake, I think I hear someone out side"
and at that point footfalls echoed
with a hastened stride.

Hansel replied, "Gretel run and hide!"
and that's what the twins tried to do
but from eating the sweets that made up the house
at least two sizes they grew.

"What is this!!!" a shrill so loud
and as high as a barnyard mouse
but then a low growl came from the witch's throat
"someones been eating my house!!"

She pulled from her side a crooked old wand
waved it, and corrected all damage
then two tiny voices came from a dark corner
"Forgive us for we were so famished."

"Oh children!" the Old witch said
licking her tongue on her teeth
eying them both with a snarled grin
and poking at their chubby little cheeks

"You will both make such nice little treats"
she said while licking her chops
and just like that she picked Gretel up
and through her in the stew pot

and Hansel met a similar fate
the main course as a roast
with a nice Chianti and some fava beans
and for sides poached pares and toast

 

now I'll admit this is a silly story

where all is not peaches and cream

but I wish you all the best of times

for this up coming Halloween






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I hope you all have fun with this and a happy halloween

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  • Moon Raven
    June 27, 2008
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    Just rereading this old story. And I must say, it is quite a treat. I surely do miss reading your works. I'll have to go back and read them again, and many I have not yet viewed. You really are an amazing poet. I hope you are doing well and hope to see you write more soon, as it is always a scrumptious treat.


  • Naughtygrlred
    January 15, 2008
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    Inresting read


  • Desire gold member
    November 9, 2007
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    Magnificent!

    Oh My Hansel and Gretel pie

    Another Magnificent edition to this tale You have weaved and hope to see more my Friend
    Keep that quill dancing and Hope You had the BEST Hallows

    Miss Your Presence here Sweet Soul
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!
    Many blessings to You and Your Little One
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Moon Raven
    October 30, 2007
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    YAY! This is an awesome story. All throughout the parts, your rhyme and flow is awesome. I'm glad you had time to write. I always enjoy your works. Poor children, eaten up. But they sure did eat the best last meal in the history of man. Lol. Very good. Have fun.


  • maryannde gold member
    October 29, 2007
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    Ah..those poor silly children. At least their last meal was a good one and they needn't worry about cavities. Hmmm I wonder if the witch will make a necklace from their teeth? LOL Hmmmm I have a sudden craving for stew!

    I wish you the darkest of nights fit for Halloween frights!

    Love and hugs my friend!
    Mary Ann


  • vampira1665 silver member
    October 28, 2007

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    FANTASTIC

    That was an excellent ending. I loved it, every word. I so wish you would do more and more often.

    Hugs and kisses,

    Vampi
    PS: I hope you and your little one have a ton of fun this halloween

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