slow metronome of heartbeat sound
and swirling thoughts within my head
from love’s rejection to rebound
pain's tiny anvils start to pound
responsibility for life has fled
slow metronome of heartbeat sound
longing to do those things profound
not viewing each new day with dread
from love’s rejection to rebound
failure inertia has me bound
the many things I might have said
slow metronome of heartbeat sound
the demons of the night surround
and bury dreams upon my bed
from love’s rejection to rebound
with timeliness my friends astound
I wish to relish days ahead
slow metronome of heartbeat sound
from love’s rejection to rebound
Author notes
Promptitude: a villanelle
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa.
The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the
poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).
In a list
A contest entry
- Round 2 of 5 - Speedy Round - 30 will advance - Invite ONLY by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended October 31, 2007, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Pel~ your format used was wonderful~ I am familar with it~ nice job! The start of the piece:
slow metronome of heartbeat sound
and swirling thoughts within my head
put the motion is set~ I think I read it as is... I could hear it~ Nice job
Congrats on making it to round 2 ~ good luck to you!
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