Kissing you gently,like a butterfly through the air
To me you are my lover,but to others they're unaware
Caressing my lovers sweet face,with the palm of my hand
Soft melodies on the radio,such a gentle sweet man.
Our love is so mixed up,but we keep the problems on hold.
Our love is our secret,what's happening between us is untold.
Only when we are alone,do we become not two beings but one.
With all these secrets,it sometimes is so much fun.
When you kiss me the way you do,i unfold in your arms
When you are laying with me,i feel no harm.
Tonight we will let the secret out,for others to see
Then maybe honey,we can start a little family.
We won't have to hide,we can finally be free
Have children roam around,happy and full of glee.
So show them slowly,what secret has been hid
and maybe tonight honey we can start to make our first kid.
Author notes
made it for the contest.see in the picture,you dont know what really is happening between the lovers,so i thought maybe the reason you can't see it is because they are hiding a secret from us until they are ready to reveal it,hope you like!!
option 1 for the rounds contest!
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awww this is sooo sweet
sighs** if only it were so good, so great , so wonderful as this!
well done on such a great write i truley enjoyed reading!
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this is terrific
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Talk about Love!
You've got quite the take on creating a new being!
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
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um....I wasn't really looking for a piece on starting a family, though that is a sweet sentiment, it's not quite what i was aiming for in this contest.
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Very nicely done. Seems a shame to have to hide a love from the world, but all too often it is the case in todays world for some stupid reason or another. Best of luck...Scott
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Rhyme is a little icky for me but this flow was alright, it could've been shaped a little better but all in all, it really does fit well and the captivating meaning is well penned.
Thanks for entering Round Two
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Interesting piece here my friend. Nicely done on this. I liked it a lot. Thanks for the read.
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Thank you, first, for including the option Second- I love this! It's sensual, mischievious and warm. Great write!
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What a great entry in the contest
best of luck to you
Delila
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Hey Raz ~ I enjoyed the poem and the rhyme~ you did a terrific job!
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Awe!! So sweet! I love the emotions in the poem and the rhyme! Great job Thanks for entering and good luck!!
Leslie
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