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Distant Dream

A distant Dream
Far
Out of reach
Yet stood so close
That I can feel
Each vibration
Of your voice

Hands
A millimeter apart
But no nearer to touching
Than if the Grand Canyon
Were between

Why do we cope
With self restriction
When the longing
Is for pain
Brought
Not through lack of forsight,
But through the foolish belief
That I could make you change

Common sense
It takes control
The moment passes
I remember
The reason for restraint
The reason for my silence
That dreams often are
Just that

Dreams

Ilusions

Figments of our imagination
That won't come true

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  • WindLeaf
    October 1, 2008

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    You've already entered this one in contests!! That's okay. You are more than able to, especially since your write is fantastic! I love your style... it really emphasizes each point you are trying to make... great job!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 27, 2008

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    Yes, in the end it is nothing but a dream. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.

    ♥
    whisper

  • Acidanthra
    September 22, 2008

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    Oh, there was a great question in this poem! "Why do we cope
    With self restriction
    When the longing
    Is for pain?" That was remarkable! It is one question with a million answers to ponder. This poem did an amazing job of driving thought into the mind's atmosphere! Great job!


  • StarIlluminated
    April 2, 2008

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    Oh wow I love this! I love the ending line it's so powerful! Great great poem too, the description is amazing! Good luck in the contest!
    Illuminated *KT*