From the journey of a dream
I awoke happy, enveloped in you
under covers
Enraptured in the blankets
of home
with you
of you
Our embrace is
the brightness
of us
with us
We are
the morning together
together in love
An awakening
is here to be
for real
at home
peaceful passion
satisfaction day
not dreaming
but being
in the lightness
of us
with us
we are warm
being the morning sun,
like banners waving
playfully above
the river of Love
extremely rippling,
our streaming
child to the river
Ripples of the day
we stream
like banners waving
playfully above
a gentle brook
child to the stream
The child's babble
joyful enough
to be a gurgle
in a float-along morning
We splash along
embraced
by immersion
and the kiss of the day,
fantastic,
better than a dream
A contest entry
- Emotions --prewrites allowed by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
380 points, ended October 30, 2007, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
comments welcome
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This is just so beautiful, I love the playful tone and how it flows along almost like a song.
Well deserving of the gold, excellent as always, Doug.
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naked roots
Thanks Beth. This started when in my book "The Blog Of The Caveman", a fictional character refers to "a song" so I had to pretend that there was a known song that was casually referred to as if it were real. When I created a fictional snippet for the dialogue, I realized I could use it for a poem here in the "real world".... and then somewhere along the line I combined two poems -- I guess that's why my files are a mess: there's bits and pieces and recombinations from all kinds of attempts and false starts, and I ask myself,what did I mean to say and how are these two short things related...
Doug
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beautiful
what a wonderful piece beautifully written well done
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This was better then a dream
To use some of your words, lol
What a pretty picture you painted out with your words
And thank you for taking the time to write something new, much appreciated
I am lucky in love ( been with him for 3 yr's )
So I love a good poem that express all there is to do with love. And you did it perfectly
Thanks and Good Luck
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A wonderful write. So expressive of such sweet emotions. This is truly love in all its wonder. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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sounds sweet... now this is love in all its wonderful glory...lovely write this one
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This is an excellent write, with a lot of emotions, i love the short lines, which created a lot of focus, on the meaning of the words, and make them stronger, i think you did a great job writing it.
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