Windshields riv’lets dance
Sodden spirits dissipate
Singing in the rain
A contest entry
- Rainy Day Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended November 10, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dust Off Those Old Haiku (Traditional 5-7-5) by Pollycheck.
425 points, ended December 15, 2007, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Windshields riv’lets dance
Sodden spirits dissipate
Singing in the rain
Thank you for the entry into my ku contest. this is a very well written rainy day haiku. And you tied it into new of my favorite movies. -
This is a gorgeous entry to this contest, well done, am glad I am not the only one who sings in the rain
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Thank you Karen. Rain is the Ying, sun the Yang.
Paul
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Windshields riv’lets dance
Sodden spirits dissipate
Singing in the rain
A lovely rainy day haiku, singing to the beat of the rain and wippers is fun. Thank you so much!
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Yours was a "Joy" to read and hope you will forgive my next intrusion as I will offer some constructive criticism.
If you change the word "evaporate" to "disappear" then the syllable count will go from eight to seven.
Good luck in the Rain Haiku Contest!
Ted E
PS: Calling ALL Rain Lovers: a group has been started for you:
http://allpoetry.com/group/show/I%20Truly%20Love%20The%20Rain
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You're right
Thank you for your comment. It's so easy to overlook proper syllable count. I'll edit it.
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i love walking out in the rain as well as the scent of a gentle new falling rain. well done and many blessings always xxx
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Ah, I used to love to walk in the rain back in my youth. It felt so spiritually cleansing...well maybe I just thought it was fun, lol.
Too often we see rain as depressing, when we should see it as a re-birth of sports.
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