Mirror’s view -
her mystique’s blessing, as later
harshness’ realities echo
life’s reflections.
Pristine thoughts
of reflection’s touch,
enciphering future’s collage –
an understanding of nothingness.
Life’s reflections later
brings worn display of
what once was to be:
‘all ye masses yearning to be free…’
Updated on 21 September 2008
Mirrored view -
her mystique a blessing,
as later harsh realities echo
life’s reflections.
Pristine thoughts
encipher future’s collage
of reflected touch –
an understanding of nothingness.
Reflections of life
later bring worn display
of what once was to be:
‘all ye masses yearning to be free…’
Author notes
Option 3
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A contest entry
- Our Song, Stand in the Rain, Behind Glass by Bella Luna.
370 points, ended February 10, 2008, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congratulations!!!!!!!
Well this sure deserved the GOLD!!!!!!! A very stunning write my friend. Imagery written with perfection to please the reader's thirst for wonderful poetry. You do have a way with words. A delight to read. Take care.
Blessings,
Sandy
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You have such a dramatic side, Frans!
I think you should try script writing too.
Loved this! And congratulations on the Gold! YAY!
One small suggestion: I would have done away with some of the apostrophes if this was my poem. It is easy to do that by rearranging words.
But, as I said: beautiful, beautiful content!
Love
Myra
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i like this poem but i think its a little to wordy and it would be nice if it was longer good job.
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BlackBleedingRose
Thank you. I am humbled by this win. I will take your suggestion up and see what I can come up with. Frans
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A brilliant write indeed! The delicate imagery you've employed has rendered the poetic piece its strength!! Way to go......
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Sadly, and unlike the other commentators, I just couldn't make heads nor tails of this piece. My loss I guess. The unification attempted by the repeated use of "reflection" just didn't seem to work.
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I enjoyed what you tried to say and get across with the write....however I would like to suggest that maybe you find a variation on the word "reflection" Of course this is a personal opinion only [but it seemed to repeat itself too often in too short intervals]But maybe you had your reasons for doing so....it always is "only the writer knows his/her objective
Best wishes,
reenie
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Powerful Poem Here
I'm speechless a bit. Yearning as the title is perfect if I get the poem right. The first line Mirror's View and the last line what once was to be: So sad really "all ye masses yearning to be free....' Excellent write, thank you for sharing with me. I must agree the part that struck me the most was Lifes reflections later brings worn display of what once was to be. Blessings Kelle Marie, stavykm
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wow this was deff one of the best so far. i love the imagery and very colorful words. My favorite lines were
"Life’s reflections later
brings worn display of
what once was to be:
asome write. Goodluck!
-BlackBleedingRos
‘all ye masses yearning to be free…’"
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This is very beautiful and I loved the powerful imagery
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