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Alone Without You

You left me without a goodbye,
You left without a word more to me,
I stand here at your grave,
After an unbearable funeral.

What do I say, What can I do,
Now that you are gone?
I'm in so much pain now,
Than I have ever been before.

I bought some flowers,
Your favourite carnations,
That are laced with my tears,
That are running down my face.

How do I live knowing you're not around?
To lay awake at night without your hand to hold,
Nor to walk in the park with your arm around me,
Or even to have a hug when I'm desperatly in need.

Now that you have passed,
I feel like my soul has died with you,
A part of me that is so irreplacable,
I've lost my soulmate and now I'm so alone.

I'm alone without you,

And I don't know how to live,

But I know you'll be watching me,

And we'll be together again soon.

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DirtyLittlePrincess - option 8 - getting your heart broken...

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  • Antebellum
    March 26
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    love the flow to it. great write.


  • Jaffa-
    January 27

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    Very very beautiful. An amazing write with a great flow. Vvery nice work, but the rules state that this poem can't have won gold or silver in other contests. I'm very sorry. Thank you anyway for the truely heartretching entry. xo

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    January 24

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    Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • infectedxheart
    January 22
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    this is so beautifully written.
    good job :]


  • wolfwatcher
    November 11, 2008

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    Ill give you a fact, you made me tear up! I cant imagine losing a loved one. I had a professor, he was really old, and it was years sense his wife died. And he missed her so much, and he talked about some of the things you talk about here. Id say you did good. Im glad you didnt actually lose your better half!!!

  • californiagirl
    March 11, 2008
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    Having lost someone I dearly cared about, I don't think this truly characterizes what it is like. It was a valiant effort, but just not there. You'll know what I mean if it ever happens to you. This was a sad poem though. Thanks for your entry and good luck!


  • pappacass
    February 1, 2008
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    so sad

    i can't imagin losing my soulmate.....i'm not sure how i'd survive...bless you and good luck


  • only1love4ever
    January 30, 2008

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    This is very touching, and a sad, glorified, special, love. It has a side to it i havent seen in a while. The way a love caresses the soul, every seam, every touch, every smell, every smile, every tear drop, how it catches every laugh and joy as they echo, every hope as it falls, and in times it seems time has no fear on it, yet when circumstances come down to this, how we teeter and totter, trying hard not to fall, trying hard to keep our breath, watching only for the sunset, begging god to come again, take another, but not them. Love~


  • InMyFlames
    January 20, 2008
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    well done thanks for your entry


  • kvwriter silver member
    January 9, 2008

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    Touching!

    And you haven't yet experienced such? The way you wrote about this loss caused me to ponder what I might be able to say to you that might help you through your grief. I'm, both, relieved and enlightened! You have such an impathetic soul and compassion breathes in each line. Well done! Beautiful and sad. Keep writing. And best to you on your nursing journey. Will be a blessing to our little ones. Be blessed!--Kel


  • Damique
    November 20, 2007

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    tears fell on my face as I read this.
    I thought about my sister and couldn't help it..

    Great Job!!


  • SilverRain
    November 9, 2007
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    Excellent poem indeed! Wonderful choose of words!


  • Artistic-Soul
    November 7, 2007

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    soft and sweet it has a very good tone and flow for such a subject very slow and heartfelt kudos you done did good thanx for the entry


  • LuckyBlackCat
    November 2, 2007
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    wow great poem, considering you have not actually lost a partner. thanks for entering!


  • karma-n-peace
    October 31, 2007

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    Yes indeed this is how one feels after losing their soul mate, you captured the raw intesity of the feelings.
    I especially relate with;

    Now that you have passed,
    I feel like my soul has died with you,
    A part of me that is so irreplacable,
    I've lost my soulmate and now I'm so alone.

    Thank you for entering and good luck !


  • TheAshtrayGirl
    October 29, 2007

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    :)

    Excellent job you did with this
    Writing something so sad,that hasn't happened
    to you but making it sound real
    Nice
    Thanks for entering my contest
    From Jaz <3


  • Griswold gold member
    October 28, 2007

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    Very sad, but I imagine it is very close to how one would feel to lose a spouse, i have yet to have that misfortune...Scott

    • Passionate Phoenix
      October 29, 2007
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      well with this write, i tried to imagine what it would be like to loose the one i love, and tbh I'd fall to pieces if he passed away.

      many thanks xx

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 28, 2007
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 28, 2007
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    pretty good...

    ...imagination if you ask me! sad but well written!good luck in the contest!


  • supervillain666
    October 28, 2007

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    its beautiful
    makes me think of how my grandfather was when my grandmother passed away. sets up the mood perfectly, emotional

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