There is a secret bond in nature’s communion
between the breeze’s touch and the branch’s whisper,
before the mist's slow glide over the shaded land
there is eternal resumption, the circle of life,
silence, sounds of morning drops, wind and rain,
scaring, beautiful, never the same.
Metamorphosis sets inside the sleepy juice of a flower's stalk,
without any command flowers are slowly exhaling colors
and inhaling even slower, deep inside
the rest of their lives, the warmth of autumn’s sun.
Petals, trembling like the tired wings of a dying butterfly.
Followed by my gaze, a lonesome bird disappears out of sight.
It is almost the end of day.
Between the dense and lazy flying clouds
scattered rays leak like from one of heaven's doors left ajar.
Night descends so fast, the shrewd thief of light.
My hands in pockets, eyes closed, from deep between the lips a sudden sigh...
Author notes
Free verse usually tells a story, or expresses an opinion. It has a beginning, a middle and an end. Before you begin to write, you should have these three elements in mind.
Write your poem down in rough form. Begin with the main idea, then the middle becomes the reaction and the end ties it all together.
Even in free verse there needs to be a melody. A musical quality to the poetry captivates readers. It is subtle and underlying. There may even be some rhyming words sprinkled throughout the poem.
Always go back over the poem to be sure of tenses and to delete excess words. You want to eliminate unnecessary uses of "the" and "of" and try to write in the present tense. Free verse in the present tense has more impact on the reader.
It's not that no rules apply to free verse; rather, the poet makes up the rules for each poem! Free verse done well will have rhythm, though it may not have a regular beat. A variety of poetic devices may be woven throughout the piece. There may be patterns of sound and repetition. Free verse can be compared to a song that doesn't rhyme. There is still a lyric quality to it.
Without set rules, you are free to decide where to break your poem into stanzas. You may arrange your poem in stanzas of two or more lines. You may break at each new thought, much like paragraphs. You may break stanzas in mid-sentence to draw attention to a specific word or phrase or even to write it italic to emphasize your image...
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- Teach Me Free Verse by Diminished Capacity.
875 points, ended September 19, 26 entries
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You did an awesome job with this write, and your advice is very clear to me, thank you so much for this, I appreciate it.
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This couldn't get any better, no matter how hard you tried. What a beautiful pieve you have penned
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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Absolutly beautiful, you painted a picture in my minds eye that I could feel in my heart
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This is absolutely amazing and with stunning imagery. I can tell you choose your words very carefully for poems, and spend much time on them - this is gorgeous and this poem takes me right to this moment where I let out a sigh from every beautiful line!
I am sorry I took so long to comment on this one, I was away for a couple days, and had to go your page to find it!!
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I like to write about nature too. It is a kind of passion for it, like a fresh breath. I wouldn't be able to live without writing
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I am starting to feel this way about writing too these days!
I feel like you breathed the fresh air of October and nature, then sighed it into this poem
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excellent description
excellent job in this one . . like the descriptions . . much insight . . like "between the breeze's touch and the branch's whisper" and "scattered rays leak" and "shrewd thief of light" . . nice write !!
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Thank you carole21 for your so nice comment's touch on my poetical site.
~Sonja~
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i really love how you chose nature to illustrate your love.
words can not describe how beautiful this is
LXF
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My dear LXF, you are always welcome to my site.
~Sonja~
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nature is one of the most significant signs of Gods love
and how we share his glory.
A beautiful story you weave of the finest points of Fall/
Autumn in its finest colors.
Tamara
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Beautiful poetry, Sonja. Very lovely and pretty. I remember writing a poem titled "september, september". It was a quickie, though. This is just excellent with a lot of lovely alliteration. Great write.
~Candy
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Well, this one wasn't a quickie one, I already told you about my writing...baking a words, changing them. I am glad, so glad that you like this one. From some special reason, I like it too.
~Sonja~
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Even the title "october, october" reads like a sigh and I love the way it links to the last line of this poem. A beautiful song to and about nature and so many wonderful visuals for the eyes to enjoy here, Sonja. You've added some lovely touches of alliteration too and I especially loved this line and the way it rolled off the tongue "between the breeze’s touch and the branch’s whisper". You have it all here.. the seasons of nature, of flowers, of day and night - just lovely poetry.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you dear Nicolette. I like autumn and its colors very much. And you are right, the title reads like a sigh... I am not surprised to see that you read it this way.
~Sonja~
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