While I descend in quiet miseries,
the night confined me in solitary guilt.
Deception escaping my rotting lips,
hurting and confusing the ones I need.
I silently dwell on the other side,
quoting prayers of a perpetual liar.
Suffocating from unsopken verity,
slowly drowning in a sea of fire.
Desolation in my hypocrisy,
enlightening shame upon a careless face.
Going against my mental oddity,
I'm not taking the blame for my mistakes.
I worship the deity of perjurer,
tempted by grevious truth and somber eyes.
From a nomadic to a believer,
I'm trammeled in a temple of lies.
A contest entry
- I WANT YOUR BAD EXPERIENCES by forever-alone.
525 points, ended December 16, 2007, 6 entries
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a VERY wide range of vocabualry and this appeasl to people of ages and it shows that you have a understanding of the written language that you have chosen. it is very good and good luck in the contest
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Ahhh long time no read your works
This is really beautiful..temple of lies ..incredible title..wow..you write like a champ...keep doing this!
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I silently dwell on the other side,
quoting prayers of a perpetual liar.
Suffocating from unsopken verity,
slowly drowning in a sea of fire.
this is absolutely stunning...this stanza as well as the entire poem. I love the slight flow yet descriptive way youve written this. Good Job!
-Shotgun
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god i will remember this
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"Deception escaping my rotting lips,
hurting and confusing the ones I need." oh these words caught me by the throat. amazing choice of words and powerful expression. i loved it!
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This was awesome, very passionate and sad but so very beautiful great words my friend x
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great vocabulary.
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The poem is powerful, and reads like an indictment against yourself. Self-loathing, we all go there at times, whrther self-induced or precipitated by others, but few are able to do it with such skill. One the one hand I want to salute your ability, on the other I want to castigate them, for having such an effect on you.
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I looooooove your nickname! this poem that I'm still reflecting upon has something special!all these word-combinations are very well chosen as the titl simply strickes from the start!well done indeed!keep up!looking forward to read more of you!
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Quite dark!!
Love the expression put into this...
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