Weep at your grave with succumbed forlorn,
I held my gaze with profound sadness.
I refuse to believe that you're gone,
even in death, my love seem endless.
Tied to a promise I can't abide,
this agony is too real and true.
I'd give so much to last through the night,
one dead star, the color of you.
Ignoring the solace they gave to me,
I smother in ample sympathy.
They don't know you reside within me,
exist in spirit without being seen.
You heed helplessly at my whispered screams,
silently dwell in phantom misery.
I gaze longingly at you in dreams,
with the presence of death in between.
You linger on the other side,
clutching at our love and lunacy.
We will meet again after I died,
lost in our never-ending story.
Author notes
inspired by 'Even In Death' - Evanescence
F u n e r a l l B a l l e r i n a
A contest entry
- A Giant Evanescence Contest by Nienna Calmcacil.
1300 points, ended September 17, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Okay. I love you. I love you. I love you.
Sadly, I'm not as impressed as I am with your other two pieces...but I'm still impressed.
Still a lot of emotion as usual...wonderful. Great job here.
You've provided me with so much hope for this contest
I can't thank you enough.
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BeaUTIFUL AGAIN. i HAVE A POEM OF THE same title if you want to check it out I hope that you will continue to write so beautifully xx
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awww that was to sad yet some how sweet
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Welcome to allpoetry
Quite a dark and depressing poem. Death of a love one can cause a momentary break in reality and sanity. It is how we choose to live on that defines the pain we suffer from. Nice flow and structure.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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This was fantastic, very powerful and beautiful in the darkest of ways goood work x
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"Ignoring the solace they gave to me,
I smother in ample sympathy.
They don't know you reside within me,
exist in spirit without being seen"....this stanza in particular is still echoing in my mind!wao!you truly have potential,a very original manner for mixing words and (re)creating emotions!well done!keep up!
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Wow....paints such a gorgeous story....
You kept me on edge-brilliant!!
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