There’s a score to be settled, there’s revenge to be had,
And it’s best to not fuck with a woman this mad.
But like always, you push me, you push me too far,
So now I’ll discard you like the trash that you are.
Did you think I’d forgive you after all of your lies?
Did you really believe me? Trust my loving disguise?
Are you really so stupid that you thought that I could,
Or are you so arrogant to think that I would?
A liar, a cheater, a thief and crook,
Too late to give back my soul that you took.
So here I am lover, with a hole in my chest,
And I’ve planned to destroy you, so prepare for my best.
Now that you love me, and it’s me who you need,
I wonder how badly I can make your heart bleed.
My anger stays patient, behind this empty smile,
But I am the judge and you will soon stand my trial.
I’ve not been so faithful, who knew I could be so bad?
And instead of feeling guilty it’s the most fun I’ve ever had.
The cheating wasn’t the thrill, it was the coming home to you,
Knowing what I just did, and then giving it to you too.
I don’t know when I became so dirty, I really have no shame,
But you made up the rules, I’m just playing your game.
At first I had to get even, but soon I had upped you one,
And before I could even stop it, Vendetta was on the run.
Every night I come home to you, I look you in the eyes,
I speak of love and life, and fill your head with lies.
Every night when I make love to you, I want you to know,
But I keep my secrets deep inside, and let your feelings grow.
Karma has been waiting to kick your ass for quite awhile,
Anticipation of your broken heart really makes me smile,
Because very soon my love, the full attack is on,
And everything you think is true will very much be gone.
So you can find another sucker to grow old with and lie,
And I can be the one you think of til you die.
The one that got away, the one who broke your heart,
The one who took your house of cards, and tore that shit apart.
You know how much I loved you, how much I used to care,
Then you broke me right in half and left me standing there.
One day you just decided you had no need for a wife,
And without hesitation, you walked out on our life.
You left me with no money, you took all we ever had,
You said you never loved me, You told me you were bad.
You never wanted children, but for ten years you lied,
I wanted to be a mother, and that part of me has died.
You’re a murderer of dreams, a killer of the soul,
And you’ve made getting even, my one and only goal.
So here we are again my friend, with the tables turned,
Standing right inside the fire, and don’t yet know your burned.
Slowly I have stole it all, the money that you make,
I have set you up to fall with every step you take.
And when your down to nothing, with no place left to land,
You will see extended, one finger on my hand.
Oh, by the way, your secrets…yeah, everybody knows,
And as I tell your dirty deeds, my hatred only grows.
You’re not a good person, it’s about time the world can see,
The man that is behind the mask, the one that fucked with me.
I wish it didn’t go like this, I wish I still loved you,
I wish I could remember what it felt like to be true.
Because I’m a different person, a whole lot less I feel,
And ever since you left me, nothing quite feels real.
I guess that’s how I survived, I focused on the score,
I had to get you back, and I had to get you more.
By now you must be worried, is this poem true?
Is this just a story? or a statement straight to you?
You would not have found this, had it not been for me,
It’s not just a coincidence, these words that you see.
So yes, I have cheated, I have stolen and I have lied,
I really truly hate you, and wish you pain inside.
And now we shall part dear, only this time I’ll be leavin’……
That feeling in your heart…the pain…..that makes us even.
Author notes
burning the book
A contest entry
- Goodbye letters by knickerdew.
750 points, ended November 1, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable winner
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650 points, ended November 5, 2007, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
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400 points, ended November 9, 2007, 57 entries
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600 points, ended November 19, 2007, 7 entries
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525 points, ended December 1, 2007, 47 entries
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375 points, ended November 30, 2007, 15 entries
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525 points, ended December 12, 2007, 67 entries
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450 points, ended December 24, 2007, 14 entries
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650 points, ended January 1, 16 entries
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Comments
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DAMN!!! This is awesome, it kind of made me feel good to read. I have poems along these vengeful lines as well but you've summed it up into one very amazing one. The anger and emotions in here are on fire and I couldn't help but smile at some of the lines, they are perfect! I've always thought like that, you hurt me, I'll hurt you more...make you love and need me, then walk out the door...like you're all forgiven and then, oh just kidding, how does it feel...but they're mostly just thoughts
Excellent...
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Damn... Ya I ain't that guy certaintly. I guess it goes to show, karma has a women's shape. this is one honest vengeful guy, and a fun read at that, have some clappies and a good saturday, drunk for me is calling...
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wow...hell hath no fury than that of a woman scorned...... powerful vengeful write that im sure many a person can relate to.....
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I had to read this again
though this long, it reads very short
nothing to take out, pay back poem sport
ever stanza, leaves you wanting more
even up the balance, level out the score
is this what sparked your writing, warmed up your words
a cheating lying jerk, sent to float with the turds
rudolf -
I think I get the message, you made oh so clear
you don't fuck with jamie, you'll pay so very dear
The angers flows, like lava's heat
across my soul, scalds my feet
you can show, volcanoes wrath
burn the past, scorch the path
eruption spewed, mountian blown
jamies ire, the world bin shown.....
rudolf
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Your very good at rhyming and making things flow from what i've read so far. This poem gave me the goosebumps; you definitley had to have actually gone through something deep to be able to write this poem and describe every feeling in detail as you did. & ANY murderer of dreams, deserves this revenge - what goes around comes around & karma is a b*tch. He deserved what he got =] This is such a deeply personal masterpiece* excellent job...
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No one should feel at all sorry for this man. To get this person this mad where she feels this strong about getting even, He's done some dirt. Hell beyond dirt, because ive been in some bad relationships but I can never remember a time of feeling this much pain. I hope this write has healed a little of your soul.
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Remind me to stay on your good side!!!
Great read and I hope we'll see you in the final. How about a bit more readable colour scheme next time though please!
Thanks a lot for the entry
Jeff and Sue
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Wow i hope i never get on your bad side.A great piece that left this reader thinking to himself be careful lad you might just be in line for something like this yourself.I have to admit in my earlier life i found out just how powerful women can be when it comes down ton giving a guy heartache Took me years to get over Sadly it also so made me harder in my later dealings with the fairer sex Good luck in the contest
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This kicks!!!
I've seen guys in real life throw away perfect women leaving heavy damage. Emotional scaring of unprettiness when they are so beautiful. Jumpy with a kiss upon thier cheek. And untrusting of the telephone. Though not a surgon i work on repairing the heart of the perfect Muse. I can only hope I have the ability to heal such wounds....With strength of my own heart. I hope this hasn't really happened to you too. This type of male is no man. If and when The Muse of my dreams says it is a committed relationship. That is final in my book.
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AMAZING! Meshi aborn ni! I love it! Enchanting, engrossing, a spell meant to make one see - emotions are tangible, don't you agree? Finalist for sure
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jamiedoring Thanks for entering jamie I have commented before. here and there lol. Congratulations on all the trophies and good luck in my contest.
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Excellent Writing - OUTSTANDING
Holy Moly, light me a Stoley. This is one hell (yes) of a great poem.
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That BASTARD!!! I thought this was real anger! Loved it! Good Luck in the contest!
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Heartbreak city, Man. So much passion afraid for the man, Very interesting though its almost like you want the audience to feel sorry for him, even though he must of done something bad, but not knowing for sure what it was, leaves audience felling sorry for him
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Dang. That's awesome. I feel sorry for the mofo that messed with you, but then again, it seems the person deserves it from your poem. I like all the rhymes in this, as I was reading I was going to point out favorite parts but the whole thing is just so great..
Awesome write and I hope you do really well in the ongoing contest(s)
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WOW! this was really good. i'm kinda out of words it's so good....so thank you for entering...and good luck not that i think you'll need it!
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Wow! The bitterness you have described here, the tears of rage and the coping mechanisms run amok, are very graphic. I both admire and fear your (narator's) stength and resolve and feel pity at the same time.
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If these words are true you certainly live up to the phrase "I don't get angry I just get even." It's a very well done piece and graphic as hell I enjoyed the read
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Wow now this is a pissed off woman, but I could totally see myself this way. I have that insane clock ticking in my body just waiting for a reason to be done wrong. That's probably a bad thing, but I like it. Jaded is the only way to be! Thank you for entering my contest. I enjoyed this piece very much. You will be considered in judging.
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you are very good with rhyming and with the flow of the words. some of the inversion could be gotten rid of and it would flow even smoother. Good Work!
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wow... thats all I can say is wow....
thanks for entering the contest..
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I wasn't convinced at first but this kept growing into something vile filled with sadistic hatred. As i was finishing this, my playlist switched to Paint it Black and I couldn't help but laugh. Remind me not to ever piss you off. This was really long but it only got better as it went on. I give clappies!
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Damn. Hats off to you my dear. This poem is amazing! The rhyming is excellant and wasn't forced. The flow stumbled here and there, but there is no such thing as the perfect poem. the stanza ...
By now you must be worried, is this poem true?
Is this just a story? or a statement straight to you?
You would not have found this, had it not been for me,
It’s not just a coincidence, these words that you see.
So yes, I have cheated, I have stolen and I have lied,
I really truly hate you, and wish you pain inside.
Seems a little cheesy. But thats ok lol. I don't think I can find a favorite part. Though I have to say the lines ...
I don’t know when I became so dirty, I really have no shame,
But you made up the rules, I’m just playing your game
Were amazing. This is a very in your face poem. And I've felt like doing something like this to my ex, but couldn't go through with it. Damn if I didn't fall in love with him again. Only to have my heart torn apart ... again. Ah well. The first time though I destroied his shit lol. Hears to us bitches that can take a punch and give the bastard what he diserves. On a scale from one to ten this poem is deffinately a 10. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
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Stunning
Wow, there is nothing much to say, this was simply amazing. I felt the anger and the determination behind every word, which was strangely inspiring. Another great aspect of the poem was the way it rhymed, very richly, yet the rhymes were not forced at all. In short, I applaud you.
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Fuckin awesome
my verdict says it all.
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HAHA, I like the anger. She seriously intends to completely destroy him. I had started to feel bad for him until I read what he had done, then I was TOTALLY on her side. Great write. My favorite part was
'And when your down to nothing, with no place left to land,
You will see extended, one finger on my hand.
Oh, by the way, your secrets…yeah, everybody knows'
Thanks for entering,
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This was very deep and very long. It seemed to not fit like I wanted it too, yet it's a wonderful read none the less. Thank you for taking the time to enter and good luck. Best Wishes.
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Ah hell hath no fury like a woman scorned,or so the saying goes,I lost count of the women who ended up screaming at me! excellent write I feel sorry for the guy though jeez, glad it wasn't me lol!
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The end line rhyme doesn't feel forced, but it's so overwhelming I found myself reading to find the next rhyme rather than to see what else is happening. I like the idea of the poem, and I certainly can relate to the feelings expressed in this. I'd like to see more metaphor and I'd like to see the images more develope. If you revise along those lines, please re-enter it.
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Gold Trophy!
I'm giving you the trophy that this deserves! I recall being impressed by the first poem of yours that I read, but this seals it. We share a common style (no wonder you like my stuff).
This just ROCKED! It's quite rare that I'm on the very edge of my seat reading poetry, grinning with silent applause the whole way! Bravisimo!!
Technically, I could point to the flow in slight ways, changing the syllable count at a few points, but it may not be worth it. This is such a deeply personal masterpiece that I wouldn't dare to edit it. Please look to my "The Big Black Rose" for a comparison!
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Wow you have yet not to recieve a gold trophy for this...Well i promise you that is about to change.. best poem i have read in this contest.. and in a long while...i loved..if its real ... sorry for your pain..but way to go on makeing him pay!!!!!
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Thank You!
Thanks so much for my first Gold!
Im so excited, this is my personal favorite of my writes, Thank you again!
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Your so welcome... i loved it so much.. its best poem i have like read and so long.. i just read it to my friend over the phone and she loves it. its great.. i plan to read more of your writeing and im goin to add you to my fav's .. keep up the great work.....!!!!!!!!
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YES!!! YES!!!! YES!!!! I know that the lord says "let revenge be mine" But seriously is there a better feeling in the world than getting back at the bastards that do this to us???? Every broken woman should get a copy of this!!!! I think it would make them stand tall and realize that while the may be down they are not out of the game!!! I LOVE this piece!!! You are AMAZING!!!
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SUPERMONTOS!
Sorry didn't find a word to describe this CRAZY amazing write..long but superb..each word lashes out with anger ..
You left me with no money, you took all we ever had,
You said you never loved me, You told me you were bad.
You never wanted children, but for ten years you lied,
I wanted to be a mother, and that part of me has died.
You’re a murderer of dreams, a killer of the soul,
And you’ve made getting even, my one and only goal.
So here we are again my friend, with the tables turned,
Standing right inside the fire, and don’t yet know your burned.
these parts are like a steak knife..splendid..sharp and deep!
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WOW (10 x 10)!
This poem has a WOW factor, on a scale of 1 to 10, of 10 to the 10th power. It is just plain, damn great. Excellent write. The anger, hurt, pain are described with such imagery. I loved it.
If this is based on a true situation, I hope you have, or are in the process of, recovering your heart. Everyone has to go thru a time of feeling hatred and anger,etc. when betrayed, but please don't let if define you in the future. Hopefully, this chump is behind you and you are starting a new life with hope and love.
Great write.
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Wow!! This is so powerful, erupting like a volcano during an earthquake on a stormy night, yet flowing like a sweet song! I've always said that women can be the most devious when it comes to revenge. Remind me never to get on your bad side.
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Wow this is indeed amazing... at first when I saw how small the scroll thing was I was all Damn I picked a long one but you caught me in the first stanza... Not many can do that... aaah the age old betrayal and revenge, honestly speaking from my point of veiw Revenge is the funnest part, theres nothing like a fuck you to get someone back... so amen to your wonderful words of pessimism that had a hint of happiness in them
chrissy
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thanks for etnering this contest...this piece is just simply sublime...i loved reading it
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Wowwwwwww you're new here. That makes this even better. Welcome to Allpoetry, I hope you enjoy it!!! x
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But like always, you push me, you push me too far
I hate to say that my girlfriend can be like this sometimes haha! It's unintentional (I think) but annoys the hell out of me sometimes.
Are you really so stupid that you thought that I could,
Or are you so arrogant to think that I would?
Nicely written.
Wow to be honest, I love every one of your first 4 stanzas. The fifth the excellent flow goes a bit...though it's a great nasty write. I love the sarcasm and lack of remorse and...enjoyment you're getting from doing this. The flow comes and goes from then on (it's mostly good) but the content is always lip-smackinginly good.
Because very soon my love, the full attack is on,
And everything you think is true will very much be gone
That's just one of many lines I love from this piece. I love the house of cards image and for once swearing actually works in a poen.
"You're a murderer of dreams, a killer of the soul"
Damn that's a good line. Your rhyme is so good, it's not forced and it just...works. It doesn't deter from what you're trying to say either, quite the opposite in fact.
Standing right inside the fire, and don’t yet know your burned.
Great! (though your should be you're)
Stole kind of stands out, it sounds a bit immature compared to the rest of this. Stolen sounds better and it still keeps the flow in my opinion.
Well this is great from start to fantastic finish. Truly loved it. It was much more than a rant, it was you taking control and kicking ass and enjoying it.
Great write. Thanks for your entry and good luck! x take care x
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even steven a fantastic write again by jamie doring
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wow this is a very good poem, and i can totally relate ive gone through heartbreak to very good write and good luck in the contest
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I though I recognized this one Excellent write..Good Luck in girlishs contest.
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good
ok but i felt it was too big a write for a poem... maybe my opinion differs, my style of writing is just 12 lines so maybe thats the difference, anyway good write...
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damn...
im sorry, but this bitch is long. ima have to read it when i have the time. wanted you know that i liked it though....it seems very interesting....so i shall return
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WOW
This is so angry and sooo well written. Some of the best rhyming I've ever seen, and the flow and word choice is absolutely flawless. However, the story behind the poem, and your talent for making the reader want to rush through to the end and then read it ten more times really makes this poem. Definitely a favourite!!
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Wow, this was really good. I really like it.
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AWESOME! OMG, I love it.
This is so full of raw yet carefully thought out emotion.
I’ve not been so faithful, who knew I could be so bad?
And instead of feeling guilty it’s the most fun I’ve ever had.
The cheating wasn’t the thrill, it was the coming home to you,
Knowing what I just did, and then giving it to you too.
This gave me chills, it was like watching a suspenseful flick and then cheering for the bad guy.
It makes want to know more but leaves me a little bit frightend for the guy LOL.
Awesome write! Thanx for entering this and good luck.
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Wow.
This was really long,
but it flowed so beautifully.
And you never went off task,
not once.
You had one purpose with all of this,
and you were sure to tell your audience
EVERYTHING.
This was amazing.
Thank you! Thank you very much for this.
It inspired me, truly.
I've decided already to take a turn with my play,
instead of secrets, it's going to be on love,
and I can use this to feed the fire!
Thank you for your participation.
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This was a little longer than I usually prefer poetry. I looked at your author's notes and neither of those options apply to my contest... So... maybe next time.
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HAHA! Great write. That was so full of hatred it was brilliant. I can sort of relate to being hurt and wanting to take revenge so I think this is why I found it so fantastic. I loved the ending!! Well done!!!
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OUCH! you certainly do not have any happy feelings for him. but then again in my mind most men are dogs anyway, and we should put them all in the same boat and bomb it once its out to sea. (preferably in shark infested water)
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wow! what a write! I loved it - full of raw emotion and that story telling, narrative style that I love.
I wouldn't edit it if I were you. Or at least keep this as one and maybe expand on some parts of it. I do feel like it could be seperated into two different writes and both would be great.
If this is a true story - good on you. I've been in the same situation and revenge had to be the answer for me too! Sounds like we have had a very simular experience.
Great write, think I'll check out some more of your stuff
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I just love the emotions in this piece. There's so much anger showing through. Wow, it always feels so good to get even with someone who put us through so much pain. I hope everything is okay. Wonderful job doll.
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WOW! loved the flow of this poem and the raw anger...excellent job....i look forward to reading more! keep writing
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Wow - this is unbelievably powerful - he must have been real bad! It's a bit difficult to read at points but I think this adds to it in a way - it's a bit difficult to explain why but it's good! I love how you say you were just angry when you wrote it, but it's seems like such level headed anger if that makes sense! It has a direction and it's very sinister and I deffinitly would not like to be on the wrong side of you! I also respect the fact that you can rhyme a lot! Wish I could do it like that! Brilliant write, keep it up!
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Wow that was very wonderful. Damn I am really at a lose for words on this one. I love these lines the most
Slowly I have stole it all, the money that you make,
I have set you up to fall with every step you take.
And when your down to nothing, with no place left to land,
You will see extended, one finger on my hand.
Mostly though the last one. Nicely done. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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