You make me feel so lost, like I never want to be found.
You make me blue so much, that no one wants me around.
You never look me in the eye, like you're guilty of a crime.
You never want to listen to me and this time you crossed the line.
You wake up in the morning, a tear stained pillow to your side.
All the broken glasses on the floor, too many of them to hide.
The sun creeps through the curtain, scared to burn your skin.
You're weak.
You're tired.
You're hurt, but you just lock it all back in.
You only ever talk to me, but I'm too dumb to hear.
All the stories that your telling me, I already fear.
I'm useless to your faded cries, I try but I'm too blue.
And the reason that I feel like this is all because of you.
The broken days pass by and you ignore the pain.
And you check me in the mirror, all because your vain.
You just don't want them to see, the broken you inside.
I'm breaking through.
I'm crawling out, now I'm too big to hide.
You blame yourself for the wasted tears, you gave your heart too soon.
So forgotton to me, buried far away, alone in your dusty tomb.
The mirror will crack, your lipstick will fade, the shell will disapear.
And the me thats deep inside of you, will finally see clear.
The night runs up and swallows you, it's me that walks your mind.
If you would have just listened to me, from the begining of this rhyme.
You wouldn't hear me screaming a murdered soul up in your head.
You wouldn't be sufforcating in your dreams.
Lay to die.
Forgotton, on my bed.
Author notes
I wote this as I was inspired by how open the contest was. An abuser can be anybody, most of the time no one else ever knows who it is and what is happening. I hope this inspires you not to let yourself get you down. There's nothing worse than looking in the mirror and seeing someone you just dont want to see. The person she is being abused by is obviously herself. Hope you enjoyed it, wish me luck in the competition.
A contest entry
- write a letter to your abuser--NOW OPEN FOR PW by Viyanna Rosemarie.
450 points, ended November 3, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Who is the girls abuser?
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Damn. this poem brought tears to my eyes. ive never read something that was so heartfelt. but yet so true. keep it up *lil mama*
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i would like to thank you for this wonderful entry into my contest. i am wishing you the very best of luck. viyanna rosemarie
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This poem does what all should but few accomplish - it takes a moment in your life and throws it up on the mental picture-screen, and teases and tortures those same emotions. Well done.
The pen and the sword,
Luci
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This is really good and unique. I didn't understand it at first but then I read the author's comments and went back and read it again and I really liked it.
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I like the way in which the meaning of this poem is sort of hiding behind the corner - who is she talking to? Who is the abuser? You sum it up in your authors notes though which is useful! Keep writing xx
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I like your general Idea behind this and I like some of your Imagery. Your rhyming seems a bit forced try letting it flow a little more naturally. You have a lot of talet cant wait to read more.
Keep Writing!!
-BrokenAngel-
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WOW this is amazing
Im in awe at you
ts got a good flow but does on time seem stressed...
Best of luck in his contest=]
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impressive
i enjoyed this hunny, understandable theory behind it, self abuse, can relate to that, most people have been the to some extend,some more that others. well done wish you the best of luck in the contest, love -freedom of soul-xxx
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I think that you could improve the general flow a little. The inspiration is clear, but I get a feeling that you had to strain certain parts of this.
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this is very good. very nicely written. good luck in the contest. and thanks for sharing.
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hmmmm...this poem is veeeeery intriguing!it has something special maybe its the simplcity i thoughts maybe its the honesty poured within each line or maybe its both.anyway,these verses burst with emotional energy!well done!bravo!keep up!
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G'day Rachael
Wonderful!! I love the way you have written this for this contest. Wow! It is so true for so many people. Honest and raw. I love this.
Different and strong!!
Best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
~Amanda
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I can understand and enjoyed what you did here. Very good take. Good luck. Rose
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