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[ The wonderous times ]

The wonderous times
seem so far from reach
teasing me
trying to get me to beg
She's not alone
I feel her pain
her absence is overwhelming
wherever I was
I knew she was there
knew she would always come back
I'm not really sure
what I know now
except that she might not come back
might have to stay
so far away
that I cannot feel her scream
or know when she smiles
or hear when she laughs
or know that she's always there
my mind draws a blank
on what I should think
or on what I really want
I want her back
I want her safe
She needs me there
She wants me here
so confusing
words getting jumbled
somebody come help me out

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  • kareneisenlord gold member
    May 17, 2008
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    Very intense and raw. I could so feel the emotional tension and the pain of not knowing how someone you love is doing. Both taking them for granted, yet doubting and wondering if you will ever see that person again. So full of anguish. I can relate. Lovely write - so full of poetic tension and reaching out.