leave your burdens like sherpas
go to the last shrine
before chomulungma
"goddess mother of snow"
mix prayers with incense
watch them climb grim
as ghosts evaporation is
painless ascent takes
everything you know
they leave bodies where
they fall beside the trail
shrouded saints in permafrost
A contest entry
- Twelve lines on or from this Mountain, by Lyndon.
1000 points, ended November 26, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Tibetan alternative name!
Why not? ALTITUDE, ancient, background, Berg, cap, Challenge, CHALLENGING, Chomulungma, climate, Concept, Crag, creation, Design, dunkel, Everest, for, forbidding, FREEZE, FREEZING, Gipfel, HIMALAYAS, Himmel, hoch, horizontal, kalt, Khumbu, klar, Landschaftlich, Licht, majestic, Mount, Natur, natural, Nepal, peace, peaceful, Peak, Pics, quiet, range, reach, Rock, rugged, ruhig, Sagarmartha, scenery, Schnee, Schönheit, Sean, serene, Sherpa, Sicht, Silent, Snowy, speechless, still, structure, tall, the, timeless, tranquility, tranquillity, Trekking, Umwelt, weiß, wht0250, wolkenlos, zenith
Here are a lot of words that I found and I have forgotten where!
I enjoyed this poem although, like Billy Collins, I prefer punctuation where it falls.
Lyndon of the Winklings. -
Thank you so much.
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Oh my, as a native american I am drawn to an image of chief Joseph, whose arm raches up in drifted snow..powerfully written and poet to watch metninks.
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I like this write!! Keep up the good work and feel free to check out my page anytime!
Jess
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G;day celtic
Your word use makes this poem burst full of life and light.
Stunning !
Best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
~Amanda
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