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saturated tears
as those outside have fallen,
disturb the water.
and as ripples pull,
the extended woe they bring
optimise return.
where, subtle at first-
the gradual flow shall cease,
making it better.
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A contest entry
- Rainy Day Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended November 10, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is brilliant, I love the emotion you have captured in such a strict form, I expect to see this one on the podium, goodluck
Karen
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good to see that you write haiku. if you can master them, it's a good road foryour poetry, coz haiku concentrate on images, rather than thoughts or knowledge.
these are 17 syllable poems, but i'm not sure they are modern haiku.
haiku concentrate on what the poet sees or hears around them, rather than what the poet thinks, believes or knows.
it's a very difficult form, yet it looks very simple.
i hope i'm not being a pain,
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so very pretty and quite lovely, thank you for sharing, best to you in the contest. ~blessings always~
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quite different from most haiku I've become accustomed to reading -but different is good! definitely a more western feel to this, your thoughts seem more complete than most I am exposed to in this form! extremely well done, Tony!
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awesome
i loved this piece . truly beautiful , and hope inspiring in a way (maybe just for me), but still an incredible write . i shall scope your page more often .
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Nice!
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The poem and photo are as near to perfection as I have seen. You are a professional poet! Good luck in the contest.
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Love the rainfall here and the Rose background (I would like to have this one myself). Good luck in the Rain Haiku Contest!
Ted E
PS: Calling ALL Rain Lovers: a group has been started for you:
http://allpoetry.com/group/show/I%20Truly%20Love%20The%20Rain
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wow
What beautiful words ringing such meaning. You do wonderful work.
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What a beautiful chain haiku. This flows like the rain and the image is simply lovely.
Love,
Amera♥
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Hello, You have penned such a beautiful haiku chain. The imagery was simply stunning and captures the imagination. Words of a rainy day with undertones of optimism of sunshine peeking out in one's life even though it is still rsining. I can relate this morning. A lovely write!!! You take care. Sandy
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Very nice haiku chain about a rainy day, with layers of other meanings woven in with skill. Thank you for this rainy day entry!
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Brilliant!
In a few words a portrait is created, polished, truly, the work of a task master Brava!! Write on poet!!
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors
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This is soooooo pretty poet! I am sure you will also win this contest.
Smile,
Judy
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wow this is good i like it and it's also pretty true
keep it up
love ya
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love the visuals you created, and the rhythm and tone of this chain. love the sense of rain being sad, but then like life, as it clears it does become better. thank you for sharing this excellent write with us.
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